Orange Lilies

My first haiku since the 6th grade.

Herbaceous beauties

     Dancing amid the grass stalks

          Like frozen fire.

Reviews

[DaughterNature]

The second and third lines are amazing, definitely capturing a strong image. Unfortunately, I have to say that "herbaceous beauties" is not what I would normally call a strong line in a haiku - remember that this form of poetry is so short that it needs to be really POW with your word choices.

[Kringefest]

Okay, thank you for your review and thanks for reading!

[Chace]

Different I just imagined flowers the color of fire.

[Kringefest]

Thanks for reading and reviewing.

[Mirra]

I'm not particular about the rules of Haiku, so I can't really say if it did followed the rules. Still, I like this poem. Been trying write one but I'm having a hard time choosing the appropriate words to use since it has strict syllable counts. Excellent piece!

[Kringefest]

Thank you very much. I admit, I did have a hard time trying to find appropriate words myself...

[Mirra]

You're very much welcome ^_^

[Ashira Macy]

Well I think you did quite well with it. The imagery was vivid and absolutely gorgeous. Now I want to see these lilies in person.

[Kringefest]

Thank you! (:

[C. Rose]

Congratulations!

This piece is a finalist for Promote Me! VI (Peace).
As your reward I have sent 115 read requests on your behalf.

Voting is open until 10/15/14.
http://www.writerscafe.org/contests/Promote-Me%21-VI-%28Peace%29/50367/

Good luck and keep writing!

[Kringefest]

Thank you very much!

[Lily Mae]

Being a Lily I have to say thank you for depicting them oh so well..xo :)

[Kringefest]

Your review is appreciated! (: Thanks for reading.

[Lily Mae]

Your welcome..x