disguised love

is this love way deep in my soul?

 

taking me over consuming me whole.

 

palms are sweaty, i'm under your spell.

 

only for you my heart is for sell.

 

taking it slow, you understand.

 

but how i long to be your man.

 

my mind takes over to a better place.

 

where all i see is your pretty face.

 

when your near, my heart skips beats like scratches on a cd.

 

pit of my stomach butterflies, no surprise.

 

so is this love thats taking me over?

 

here you are, my four leaf clover.

 

always reliable.

 

the way you make me feel, undescribable.

 

i can't lie.

 

your eyes twinkle like stars in the sky.

 

priceless, your personality, your style.

 

i'd do anything, just to see you smile.

Author's Note

i think this is my best one

Reviews

[justice]

I definitely agree that this is the best of yours I have read. The subject matter is strong and evokes an intense emotional response from the reader. What I like most about this poem and what makes it your best that I have read is the fact that you go from telling to showing. You show the reader what is happening to you. The sweaty palms, and butterfly stomach, are great images that a lot of people can relate to and truly get "into" the poem. I would advise you to keep writing this way. Keep trying to describe how you are feeling instead of telling how you are feeling. It is a big step in an authors career when he or she can take that step. I really enjoyed this piece. Thanks a lot for sharing it and keep on writing!

[EvilAngel]

agreed