LOVE

       

            Longing for him
            One that I haven't met yet
            Vibration of tides
            Endears him more in the imagination

          

            Lucky I am
            On the ground, I found
            Vivid green four-leaf-clover
            Enlarges my expectation

           

            Lost in daydreams
            Octet echoes in the light
            Vibrant notes in the sky
            Encourage me to take a step

           

            Love, my love
            Only if you were with me
            Virtual moments will no longer last
            Every sparkle will become true

           

            Longest time, have I waited

            One stands with me face to face
            Vows in silence, no words spoken

            Engage our time for a moment and forever

Reviews

[Lyrical Love]

Great content...a bit choppy with the flow/rhythm. Overall good job!

[Dalaina Renee]

Wow! I really enjoyed this! Good work!

[Blue Cavalla]

You've tackled a very dangerous subject here. Love and lust is hard to get right because so many people do it and everything seems cliche. However I think you've done well. For a genre that's everyone's first port of call you have made it rather different and conjoured some decent little vibrations in my mind-tank. I like it a lot. Keep 'em coming.

[Anna]

It's not the most amazing poem but it is decent. Play with your words and maybe you'll stumble across something that's better.