Wal-Mart Run

                        I have been....................Wondering where you are

            waiting for you..................in my time of need

             for hours on end.................and my chest aches

 you said you'd be back soon.............and my heart is tingling

 but you were with him................I think I am dying

    and our love, it has turned stale...............please somebody help me

                      so this is how it ends..................can you die from a broken heart?

Author's Note

My first attempt at a Trigee Acrostic (Thanks Underdog) and this is how it goes. There should be three seperate poems here, but I added the extra element of the hidden words and hidden meaning as they are not necessary in such a piece.

Reviews

[Constance]

Don't JUST thank Underdog. The form was invented by my friend C. T. Bailey, who challenged me to write one as a big joke so I did, and then made a contest here on the cafe, which ended back in October. Alliteration was added to that one too.
Now the extra hidden words. THOSE ARE AWESOME. I wish you woulda entered my contest. There weren't many entries, but it's now voting.
You rock. Takes real talent to play with words on this level.

[Susan S.]

I did one of these about 7 years ago but nobody actually got it until I performed the piece with different people voicing different segments of the poem. I'm glad to see the form take flight. I've never tried a four poem splice. That was tremendous.

damn.

This is one tough piece to put together, and you pulled it off.

Great fundamentals, the fourth poem is slightly confusing, but I got it, and it is cool

This is a great piece.

[R J Askew]

I'm getting the hang of it! Not sure I could do one, but I rather like the trick of it! But pulling it off! Your poem is full of that certain torment that follows the crash and burn stage of love! Enjoyed it.

[cyanskye]

Wow - this is amazing. You have succeeded in giving me three headaches with some hidden eye twitches thrown in although they are not necessary. You people and your poetry, sheesh!
Love it by the way!!

[Constance]

Oh, and here's a link to that contest. Go check it out and vote! The one I wrote is in the description. Not nearly as clever as yous.
Alliterative Acrostic Trigee? What the Heck is That?Jul 2, 2008 - Oct 13, 2008

[Mark D. Chevalier]

I love this form of poetry. It's so dynamic! Haven't found the inspiration to do one myself.

Sad theme, but one that many have experienced. Ah life, the great mystery. But where else can we explore but through the written word.

Excellent piece!

Mark

[Dempsey Wilson (D.L. Wi..]

Very interesting piece, Jeff. It's definately unique and it makes the reader think about it. I've never heard of a Trigee Acrostic poem. Entertaining nonetheless!

[HoorayForUnderdog]

OOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOHHHHHHHHHHH....you be so dang tricky! I love the extra hidden words...that is too cool ! I'm not worthy !!!!! I'm not worthy !!!!


ps...YOU ROCK!