Till Death

You said to her once

“I will never let go”

And you lied, oh so you lied

She fell, and you were not there to hold

To keep her from harm

To love and to cherish in action

Not just in words

In sickness and in health

She was there for you to treasure

And love, oh so to love

Till death do you both apart

 

You promised to her once

“You’ll never be lonely”

And you lied, oh so you lied

You let her sleep alone

With the bugs in the shower

And the noise from the stairs

When she needed a shoulder to cry on

You weren’t there

To calm and to ask how to make it better

And hug, oh so to hug

Till death do you both apart.

 

She is now with another

Sharing the same bed

Living the same life

That you had in mind for her

As time made its deadly approach

To your conscious

And now you are sad, oh so you are sad

And sorry about your lies

And the way that things ended

In your way, oh so not the way you have planned

Death realizes it should have been different.

 

And you didn’t have a chance

To see her so happy

In the happiest days of them all

When she was the bride and you were the groom

If that day would come it was worth it all

But no, you said to her once

That you wouldn’t let go and she’ll never be lonely

But you lied, oh so you lied

And you’ll always be lying

Till love, Till life, Till death

Do you both.

Apart.

Reviews

[Dreaming of Revenge]

This is really sad and full of heart. I love the honesty in it. The metaphors in it are spectacular as is the word choice and all. And the ending is just fabulous. I love that..."Till love, till life, till death do you both apart." That's really quite awful in a wonderful sense. It drives home the point and just sums it all up so prefectly. Very good. Very good.

[universalove]

THIS IS A VERY SAD POEM THAT HURTS THE HEART AND SOUL THAT HE LIED SO MUCH AND LOST WHAT HE LOVED SO MUCH.THIS POEM IS WRITTEN TO HONEST. CAUSE THINGS LIKE THIS COULD HAPPEN.

[universalove]

words for thoughts. dont make me cry cause i love to lie. this is what a man does to himself because he cant find a way to hold on. and at the end she isn`t his freind. love is lost ??????good write

[Angel's Lady]

Yes...most thought-provoking indeed. Thanks to mizmetaphysicallady for showing me this nugget of gold. Very touching and most poignant that those we believe in the most are not always ones to be believed at all. Great write.

[Marvin Lewis Jr.]

Bravo!
I believe that the structure, metaphors, and the wordplay was simply genius.
One of many favorite parts I have... "You let her sleep alone with the bugs in the shower and the noise from the stairs" this is truly clever and the way you ended this poem deserves a standing ovation!

From one writer to another, this is now one of my favorites!


-Marvin Lewis

[Silent Kim aka mizmetap..]

Wow, this is very touching and I felt it personally. You did an excellent job with this Apart that just says it all. I can't cut a piece out of this and say it was the best because the whole poems speaks volumes of what love is.

I really enjoyed this poem and will share it. Pleasure to accept your friend request.