Moderately Depressed

Moderately Depressed

A side of Panic Attacks

Time to give it a rest

 

It's not so severe

That I hate life completely

But that's what I fear

 

It's not so mild

That I can just ignore it

My brain is going wild

 

I'm losing all my interests

Nothing really makes me happy

Happiness- I miss it

 

Fakes smiles and fakes laughs

Can you tell that somethings wrong?

Good things- they never last

 

Moderately Depressed

A side of panic attacks

Time to give life a rest

Reviews

[Matthew Ian Herrawood W]

Short and sweet. well not sweet but the pem is good even though the story is not a happy one. it flowed well although i think that the 2nd line in each stanza felt a bit "stiff" to me. for diffrent people that could work to your advantage making the poem have more feeling but for me it worked the other way. Overall its a good poem that was enjoyable to read despite (as i have mentiond) the theme.

[An owl on the moon]

You so clearly express the numbing effect of depression.. how it works so slow and takes it time to steal joys and life from us.. I can relate to this one.. was there so long.. glad to be on the other side. This is so powerful..

[emmajoy]

'Time to give life a rest' - life is so precious that it's sad to read those words .. maybe giving self a rest in the noise and pace of life is more to the point.

Being down, feeling blue is part of discovering how beautiful things can be .. guess we have to have day to find night's beauty, have summer to appreciate the wonders of winter ..

Sorry, i went from your poem to your feelings .. your poem rings of absolute truth, maybe you've even restrained yourself from yelling out words, but the emotion's here for sure .. plus, you've set out your words well, kept the meter going and made the readers sit up and think.

[Brighid an Lasair]

I like this, but I have to agree, it seems to be lacking true depth, which I would have liked to see; however, it's also very appropriate considering this line:

I'm losing all my interests

The style you wrote it in drives that line home and really shows that even one of your passions feels empty now. Great work! It's very easy to relate to think as it's something that everyone goes through at some point. On the flip side, when you hit this point, keep your head up, it will get better.

[T]

I can see by the comments people agree with you. Your reflecting a normal part of life that so many go through. It's just so hard when your in it and you can't get out. Nice job.

[Allison]

I really liked this!
'Happiness-I miss it'
This line really caught my attention, I loved it :)
Keep writing

-Pokie

[RJM]

everyone feels this once in a while, I've had bouts of depression too. It's nicely done really put a good thought into this but it seemed that you were holding back a few things and all I can suggest is don't hold it in. Release your pain into your paper and watch the world turn brighter

[Moonflower]

very relatable, good job.

[Jonathan De Elvira]

You are talented...
Just don't hold back next time especially in this kind of poem...
The depressive poem needs to have some depth, honesty, anger, and a lot more frustration, not just sadness...anyway, I appreciated this write while reading this, you're far a better writer than me so I know that you can do better...

[Loner]

Beautifully portrayed , u sure have a talent Girl !!!!!!!