Sleepless

I wrote this on a night I couldn;t sleep... then i fell asleep

I lay here. Sleepless.
I sleep. Dreamless.
I dream. Lonely.
I am. Lonely.

I lay awake at night.
Just trying to fall asleep.
I had a long day.
And I am beat.
My eyes are heavy.
Everything's still.
Yet I lay awake here.
Nothing feels real.
It works when,
I write or read.
I lay down.
And try to sleep.
But yet I'm still awake.
And now I count sheep.

I lay here. Sleepless.
I sleep. Dreamless.
I dream. Lonely.
I am. Lonely.

Reviews

[Candylove.]

This is soo good! It's simple, but it's structure and your word choice make this brilliant. You have a way with words; keep up the good work! :)

[Kia-chan!]

I really love the parts where it says, "I lay here. Sleepless. I sleep. Dreamless. I dream. Lonely. I am. Lonely." It felt so deep, so heartfelt. Very good write :)