Daffodils

Daffodils

A Poem by kayla
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semi-dark poem

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I'm picking you some flowers,

I hope that you don't mind;

the occasion for these daffodils

continually on my mind.

 

You said that you loved me,

but now that is not so.

It seems to me it's time

for you to finally go.

 

Some would think me crazy,

but I don't really care.

You made me a promise,

then broke it fair and square.

 

So now I'm picking daffodils

for your funeral later on.

You know you broke our promise,

your consequence: dead and gone.

© 2012 kayla


Author's Note

kayla
This is an idea I came up with from the photo up top. Takes heartbroken ex-girlfriend to the next level, kind of "stalker-esque". Tell me what you think.

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Deadly. The last line is dark but well written. Great job!

Posted 12 Years Ago


"You know you broke our promise,
your consequence: dead and gone."
Some woman could lead to a bad ending. I like the gentle start leading to the surprise ending. Thank you for the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

Posted 12 Years Ago


Hmm . . . I'm not quite sure whether I adore the concept much; but it is a unique one that I have not seen much of before. Nonetheless, despite my dispute whether I admire the concept; you've done a fine job expressing yourself.

Posted 12 Years Ago



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Added on July 24, 2012
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Tags: death, breakup, stalker, poem, poetry

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kayla
kayla

Los Angeles, CA



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Becoming active on this site again! Originally started my account as teenager, but am a young woman now with hopefully still just as much to say. I write mostly poetry (but occasionally short stori.. more..

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