Peace Offering

a love poem

I handed you a peace offering:

my mangled and bruised heart.

I didn't want it's burden,

I took a break to depart.

I never expected you to mend it,

not after all the things I had done:

I've hurt you so many times

in many more ways than one.

 

But when I handed you my heart,

you didn't throw it away.

You didn't break it any further,

let predator become prey.

I never expected to love again,

not after all that I had lost

the love I had last time

I could barely stand to pay the cost.

 

As the weeks turned to months

I learned my heart was in good hands,

I had finally made a good decision

and picked the right man.

You taught me how to love again

when after being abused I didn't know how.

When there's nobody else I can count on,

I know you'll help me out.

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Please tell me what you think(:

Reviews

[外人 (Gaiji..]

Oh sweety !! That's so beautiful, and sweet, and sincere ... we're all looking for someone so special :)

[Vee Cole]

I loved this poem it wasn't way over top I thought it was just right. I loved how it's written and message behind it. This speaks to me any many way than one. So I love this poem thank you for writing it.

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the story in the poem. A wounded heart need a lot of tender living care to be strong again. I like the positive ending.
"You taught me how to love again
when after being abused I didn't know how."
Thank you for the outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Celestial Witch Child]

Uhm... I don't know. I can kind of take or leave this one. The whole thing feels a little overboard.

[kayla]

I revised it(:

[Laura Maidah]

It's very sweet sixteen, prom heartbreak. Sorry. Not a fan of this one. No profundities found here. Try some images, show, don't tell yadayada. Oh, and only repeat lines that are deep enough to merit the distinguish. The repetition as it stands is pure overkill. Just my opinions remember.

[kayla]

I changed the poem, because looking over it, I do agree that it had that kind of feel. That's definately not what I was trying to convey in the poem.

[Tai Ryens]

I like it, and how it evolves from a shattered heart to a fixed one. The repeated lines were also a good perk to this, well done.