"words"

“words”

 

Your words are like sugar

Guilty pieces of pleasure

That dissolve rapidly

Against my golden tongue

 

Your touch is so uncanny

With just a simple gesture

You cause erotic eruptions

To travel down my spine

 

Once upon a perfect melody

Is how your voice carries

Against the strum of my ear

Causing my toe to tap in synchronicity

 

Distance is an unfair thing

Even when you’re next to me

You feel as if you’re gone

A million miles from my heart

 

As our bodies entwine

In a serpentine like destiny

Our heartbeats increase

With what we both inspire

 

Stay with me always

Let not the harsh reality

Chase the divine light

From your gentle face

 

Express the deep emotions

That are etched into our souls

To write a perfect love song

That only angels may sing

　

　

My silent prayer

Is that that my words

Will always convey

 

This eternal true love

You have blossomed

So eagerly within my heart

　

Kenny L. Mitchell

August 29, 2010

　

　

　

　

　

Reviews

[Michael X]

Good work kenny, this speaks volumes, and carries a subtle romantic depth
yet defines the muse in many ways, at the same time, you present classical
imagery and feelings in the valentine spirit, or heavenly celestial in outlook,
something I havent read in WC in quite a while, i can see the passion here
and appreciate the heart and soul, the title is fitting, words have a sense
of magic that can take the reader to another time, many key words
here create the old style sense. great job, thanks for sharing your talent

[emmajoy]

How wonderfully romantic, unforced, flowing .. IF written for a darling, so hope she's read this or had it read to her - even better!

IF written about words, then you fly high; words can be lovers, close or distant, they transform feelings into caresses and you've created exactly that picture.

Unless definitely alluding to words, there's one thing I noticed, maybe misconstrued : 'Distance is an unfair thing ~ Even when you’re next to me ~ You feel as if you’re gone ~ A million miles from my heart' - why 'You', second line, and not 'I' ?

However, this is lovely: 'To write a perfect love song ~ That only angels may sing'

[Ruth]

An awesome way to portray the love of words!
A wonderful poem:)
Great structure too! The ebb and flow of everything!
Excellent!
xx

[Camille Corbett]

ummm you used words in the wrong context, I felt very uncomfortable reading this. Dude, what's wrong with you?

[Thecreekdontrise]

"Once upon a perfect melody"

A Very Perfect Line,
it also reminded me of one of my poems
We Think Alike,
As thinkers, do (:

[JelliFyshKissUs]

Oh my word--no pun intended--this is pure euphony! A soul-binding piece that takes me on a melodic journey of the deepest yearning. If only my husband could say he loves me in such lyrical ways. But I guess I'll make do with the simple I love you's he gives to me. Truly angelic, Kenneth. My heart became weary with longing as I read this. Thank you for sharing.

[Lola Nation]

thanks for the read request - I had one suggestion because this seemed reversed to me:

Against the strum of my ear

I would state strumming against my ear ... (being played to rather than as the instrument)

[Mark]

A little bit curious about the line, "even when you're next to me, you feel as if you're gone a million miles..." Is he doubting his ability to be as attractive to her as she is to him?
Apart from that momentary pause, a lovely expression of the degree of helplessness our wives and lovers can draw us to.
My only edit might be to say that "serpentine-like" is redundent. Serpentine is already an adjectve. Suggest either "serpentine (without the 'like' )" or, "serpent-like".
Thank you for this very tender reminder, friend.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

How lovely and romantic! I enjoyed this a great deal.

[Abdul]

this is excellent

This is beautiful. While I was reading this, I saw an entire scene in my head of a man telling his bride at the alter these things. Wedding vows, is that what they're called? I'm at a loss of words for now. The simplicity of the words, but the great meaning each of them has is amazing. You did a fantastic job, and I will look forward to furthering my journey through your wonderful pieces of literature.
100/100