"Words Can Say"

“WORDS CAN SAY”

 

 

When I have gone astray

You put me in the right direction

Until the stars fall from heaven

You have all of my affection

 

 

You’re the very definition

Of what a friend should be

There are not enough words

To describe what you mean to me

 

 

Your beauty is amazing

Such a lovely work of art

But your truly greatest treasure

Is your always loving heart

 

 

The heart is not defined

In how much it aches & yearns

But in how much love you give

And the miracle that it returns

 

 

I find something so beautiful

Each time I look into your eyes

Something warm and so inviting

It takes me completely by surprise

 

 

I hope you always realize

The wonderful person you are

Not only are you my angel

But my one true guiding star

 

 

Thank you beautiful woman

For being my inspiration

And making the worst of times

Ones of joy and of celebration

 

 

My heart will always be with you

Even until my dying day

How much do I care for you?

Even more than words could say

 

 

Kenny L. Mitchell

November 17, 2006

 

Reviews

[Lunar Lightning]

I would recomend reviewing grammar and the flow of the peice, if you would like to hear my thoughts on it just message me and I'll gladly lend a hand. I really liked this peice, and I think you could expand off of it to make an array of poems out of the subject. Really great job!

Luna

[Lunar Lightning]

I would recomend reviewing grammar and changing one or two things to make the peice flow just a little more. if you would like to hear them just message me and I'll gladly lend a hand. I really liked this peice, and I think you could expand off of it to make an array of poems out of the subject. Really great job!

Luna

[Lunar Lightning]

This is a very good poem, though I do have a couple suggestions for you, I really hope you don't mind. In the line "But your truely greateset treasure" I recomend changing "treasure" to "feature" but, that is up to you. Perhaps making "Something warm and so invinting" into "Something so warm and so inviting" would make the line flow more. And one last thing, i would say "Even on my dying day" rather than "Even till my dying day". I really liked this peice though, keep on writing!

Luna

[deeps]

Wow! This is amazing write here
I can feel your emotion you put into this.
Such flow with words as well, you are very poetic.
This is a beautiful write.

[Ophelia]

This is so beautiful. I almost started crying reading this. This is probably one of the best poems I've ever read. Excellent job. I can tell you put all of your heart and soul into this, and it's very beautiful. You have true artistic talent.

[Destinee]

This is just... wow. I loved it. So heartfelt. "I find something so beautiful each time i look into your eyes." my favorite part i think, though it is hard to say because it was all so awesome. Great write!