Someday Soon In The Future

You suddenly complete me

Someday, we’ll be as close as two strangers sitting under a light post

Both sharing the glow of the night

While not caring who is wrong and who is right

Simply sitting on the park bench together, we’ll remember most

 

Going nowhere, I’ll purely see, that love’s hands have given you to me.

 

Soon, we’ll be as happy as two artists arranging a place to fall

For if our love should ever be in the dust

We’ll pick it back up where we left off if we must

For we’ll surely find a place to hang our love’s portrait on the wall

 

Going somewhere, we’ll wholly be, knowing that love’s eyes have seen us free.

 

In the future, we’ll be as thoughtful as two thunderous voices in the rain

Telling our secrets to each other with such ease

As we dance, play and carelessly stumble, landing upon our knees

For nothing can get us down, gazing at the drizzle on the distant plane  

 

Going everywhere, you’ll wistfully heed, that love’s heart has given us its seed. 

Author's Note

I hope and wish for this to be true. For someday soon in the future, hopefully I'll finally find true love. Also the picture is by the famous photographer- Robert Doisneau.

Reviews

[Onyx_Rayne]

Very beautifully written... amazing flow and lovely imagery.

"Going somewhere, we'll wholly be, knowing that love's eyes have seen us free"

I feel like we all have a destiny in love... sometimes, it takes us a while to find it and we take some wrong turns along the way, but "love's eyes" know where that destiny lies.

Gorgeous write :)

[Charles]

Great poem. Tight rhyming scheme, good flow, good theme. Everything about this fits together well and t'was a pleasure to read. :-)

[FlawedByDesign]

"For someday soon in the future, hopefully I'll finally find true love." - this bit made me a bit soft. A lot of us would love nothing more, than for this to happen.

I enjoyed the sentiment in the poem. Starting off with the "sharing the glow of the night", which i thought was clever, to "For nothing can get us down"

The ABBA rhyme did not work well in my opinion. I've tried this kind of rhyme before, but the A's are just too disconnected by the B rhyme, that the A rhyme gets lost.

Well done.

[A.Lee]

Very nicely written. I love the feeling of it. It flowed beautifully and very easily. Great work on this.

[J.S. Pua]

nice..
it has an interesting structure..
i find it refreshing..
it had a lot of good lines..
and i particularly like the first part..
somewhere in the second stanza,
i was reminded of one of my works..
great write..

[Coyote Poetry]

Life can surprise you. I found people with the same goals and dreams in many places. I like each set of lines. Telling a different tale and story. A very good ending to a outstanding poem.
Coyote

[DamienHino]

I totally agree with Onyx_Rayne. Amazing piece, nice structure which allows your message to flow through our minds so elegantly

[Bette]

I like this, it was a different style for me... well done

[An owl on the moon]

I just love how your story unfolds, with the soft repetition that gently changes as you grow closer together. Beautiful and uplifting! I know you'll find that love and these words will have that much more meaning for you.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

It is a beautiful wish indeed for nothing is greater then two hearts combining... a really touching piece of writing.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

It's not fair to make an old man fall in love with you by bewitching him with your wonderful words. ;o) Awww this was beautiful! You have such a beautiful soul. Love the photo too! I like the disapproving sneer of the old prude in the background of the photo as much as the passion and tenderness of the lover's kiss. It shows what a greatly maligned business true love can be. My highest marks!