I Need to Escape

At night I lay awake

Hoping

Dreaming

Praying

Looking for a way to

stop

Halt

Cease

These neverending

Nightmares

Horrors

Fantasies

That make me

Scream

Cry

Beg

I so badly need

Freedom

Relief

Rest

But it won't come to me.

Author's Note

I'm open to any and all crticism. It helps me grow as a writer and is greatly appreciated.

Reviews

[Liza]

the mind is already escaping the body in these words....i know the feeling; of our innocence being taken away and the cold reality setting in.

[Jeff]

I like how you structured this piece. It's very desperate sounding.

[Lilly Negoi]

mmm, a bit obsessive-compulsive with that "power of 3" structure...but in the context of the message, it works very nicely :). good work here :).

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

This is a well desciptive poem! GREAT JOB!

[KAREN]

Wow! No Crticism here! Ilove the way it is written and the feelings bought out was expressed so well!

Muy bien!