What One Needs to Write

You do not need a scenery to write

you got a pen in your fist, fire in your lungs

and images from a travelled soul in your mind.

close your eyes, breathe in

hear the raging storm long since held and now

unchained

the waves blasting on a foreign shore

splattering saltwater and dead fish on the great grey rocks.

giant's feet

dragon eggs

that's what breathing means, crushig against the stone

how long can you hold it until spray and tang get soaked under the next wave?

Listen to your pulse

how many slaves would have died on that bloody galley by those drum beats of yours

I wonder how long a heart can keep on going after

being ripped out of it's cage.

images must never only be bright

and now you hear a scratch

or is it a screech?

A scratch to ease the itch of an uneasy pulse

a screech to let the brunst out of your stifled soul

just a bit.

Write till the tide lowers,

write

till

all

galleys

sink.

Author's Note

tell me what you think

Reviews

[Nikolean]

It is well written, with good imagery

[Bushra Naqshbandi]

An absolutely amazing poem! A really creative piece with brilliant and flashy imagery.

You do not need a scenery to write
you got a pen in your fist, fire in your lungs
and images from a travelled soul in your mind.
A nice and catchy way to begin the poem. Beautiful lines. :)

hear the raging storm long since ''hold'' and now
unchained
The line is powerful and impressive but it should long since ''held'' not ''hold''.

the waves blasting ''at'' a foreign shore
Striking use of imagery in the line but it should be ''upon'' a foreign shore not ''at''.

splattering saltwater and dead fish ''at'' the great grey rocks.
Here, it should be ''on'' the great rocks not ''at''. Apart from that, the line is written very nicely. I liked it a lot.

A scratch to ease the itch of an ''unease'' pulse
The line has a tongue-twister sound to it and I loved it. Absolutely. :) But I didn't understand ''unease pulse''. Perhaps you meant uneasy pulse and if not do let me know the knowing. :)

A greatly enjoyable read. Good going! :)

[Vader]

Thank you very much for your corrections and the sensible way of telling me, the foreign flounder, apart from writing me some sweet lines that make my ego blush.
Klara

[Zac]

This is a very deep and yet problematic poem.
you have great dialogue,
hope to read more.