Closing the Casket

It over, it’s done, the curtains’ closed.

I gently lay down this delicate rose.

The door is shut, your life has gone.

I guess it’s time to move on.

If only you had gotten better…

Goodbye, my dear, I’ll love you forever.

Reviews

[Bakari Bruce]

Wow, there are some great metaphors in there. Really deep, too. The only thing I suggest is on the fourth line add another syllable to make it flow better. Its great how much meaning you can fit into a short poem. Just play with the language. Find what fits and whats sounds good to the ear. Great poem.