There it is, Off to the side, Playing at the periphery of my sight. I know the game, Taunt me...Tease me, Staying just out of reach. Do I try to capture it again? I know I will fail, I always do. It mocks me, Happy with its cruel joke. I know the truth, I am not allowed to win. So, why do I play? To cheat fate? Maybe. Here it comes again. Should I ignore it, Pretend its not there? Be patient, Wait...patience...wait. Just a little longer, Let it come a little closer, almost there. So close now, I feel it brush my cheek, Like a light breeze. I reach, with all my speed.
Missed again. I am not surprised. How do you catch an illusion?
kjelland 13 this is an excellent piece. There is a wrestless enegry in this piece that grabs the reader right to the end, There at the end, the reader expires his/her breath. This inner energy grabs you right through. Congratualtions I look forward to reviewing more of your poetry.
In all brutal honesty, this is beautifully done. Granted, it isn't formulaic and stuffy... pish posh. Free writes can be just as graceful, and you've accomplished such. The only suggestion I can make is to use your full vocabulary, make the words pop... though I have no certain intent with that statement, would not choose alternate words for you. It's lovely as is.
kjelland 13 this is an excellent piece. There is a wrestless enegry in this piece that grabs the reader right to the end, There at the end, the reader expires his/her breath. This inner energy grabs you right through. Congratualtions I look forward to reviewing more of your poetry.
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