Slow Motion

My mate Charlie (themadhatter)'s poem "Dead Ink" partly inspired this song about how I've been feeling for the last few days

Tick tock

Detached. Unavaliable

 

 

See me

But dont see what I've become

 

 

Click. Drip.

Solitary movement

 

Reach out but you can never touch

What should be there.

 

 

 

Its like we're in slow motion,

Every breath laboured without any aid

As if we're in slow motion,

And every year is just an ugly day, just an ugly day

 

I get the feeling

That everyone is having more fun than me

And I truly believe

That life isnt waiting for me

Its supposed to stretching out before us

But all it does is collapse around me

Wont you wait for me?

 

Its like we're in slow motion

Every breath laboured without any aid

As if we're in slow motion 
And every year is jut an ugly day, just an ugly day

 

 

I

Want

More

 

 

Author's Note

its supposed to be a song so it would sound better if sang

Reviews

[Secondhand Tink]

I feel like this so often I love the one word sentences, very strong,

Love it

love you

[The Boy Who Cried Wolf]

I really like this.

I think its a bit generous to say Dead Ink inspired this, as i personally don't see its influence but you know i suppose...

I really like the opening few couplets here, very effective as an introduction.

Also i think the use of a small font makes it seem like a thought or a whisper, which again i find really effective.

Good work. :) (felt like a spazzy git writing all that lol, i don't think i'm meant for review writing)