Beautiful Liar

Wrote for a contest. Evoked some well buried feelings, none of them slightly sad.

Black like the sofa, I wept ingloriously upon

And black like the feeling, when numbness has won.

A long helpless plight of nothingness, stretching out before me,

What I once thought was "true love" has ended, and its oh so frightening.

 

Black like your hair, contrasting the milk white of your skin

And the brown in your eyes, suddenly turns to coal coloured sin.

And I used to sit on your lap and stare at the black you would wear,

Wondering and touching, feeling the wickedness of this "affair".

And now I'm nostalgic all my mind feels is dead,

Treacle filled nonsense, like black coloured dread.

Every memory black listed and thrown into nothingness,

Into that big empty black hole, filled to the brim with adverseness.

 

You broke me, you bruised me, and every other cliche,

You tore me and shamed me, because thats just your way.

They call me a heartbreaker, because I flit from one to the next,

But unlike you my "conquests" arent just a timewasting project.

I can assure you darling, youre not the battering master,

Your heartbreaking aims fail fabulously, like each of your petty disasters.

Reviews

[Secondhand Tink]

^_^ already commented this one so i wont repeat myself, excellent write very evokive

This is very good! I love the color you used. It really gave the poem a "punch". Bitter but yet strong! Great write!

[Spilled Her Guts in Cur..]

the use of colour and size is pretty awesome, love. And it's so bitter and just full of raw emotion. You're actually a legend.

[Jane Doe]

I loved this piece too. I especially liked what you did with color. Wonderful poem!

[Secondhand Tink]

Ooooh this is lovely and bitter,
I actually think its really good Kirst =]
It really envokes bitter anger and hatred wiv a mix of wickedness.

Very good write babe.
xxxxxxx

[Tessa Le Rouge]

i love the last line.
"your heartbreaking aims fail fabulously, like each of your petty disasters"
it's a poem in itself.
good job.