Invisible

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Invisible.
Locked away.
Nobody notices me.
They've thrown away the key.
Trapped.
No way to get out.
Stuck in this hell.
I call it my life.
The many changes.
The many stages.
The trials and torment I've suffered through.
The patience.
The time.
The waiting.
That's all I ever seem to do.
I'm lost.
Suffering.
Yet not one person hears.
Not one person tries.
They all just cloud my head with lies.
Giving me false hope.
Drowning now.
Not being able to breathe.
Suffocating.
Waiting to be set free.
But life has a plan for me.
That's what they all say.
Why else would I be here, right?
They're all wrong.
I'll be the invisible one.
The one that not one person sees.
I'll be hiding among the shadows.
Watching.
Waiting for that one person.
The one that can set me free.
Loosen the chains that bind me.
Let me feel alive.
Relieve this pain.
Heal the wounds.
Feel me.
Breathe me in.
But that'll never happen.
Not until he'll see me.
Not until he'll notice me.
Not until he'll give me that chance.
The one that could possibly change my life.

Reviews

[Damien Dsoul]

It sure would have been nice if the narrator could give us a clue as to the one person who's going to set her free from her eriee prison. Is he a would-be lover, or could he be The Man Upstairs? The suspense is there, but it sure would have been nice to put us down gently back to earth after feeling through the poem's climatic build up.

[~*666 Draven Von Tepes ..]

i tried to help u and all u did was turn away and turn into a moron next time some one trys to help u dont turn away

[Janice Ann]

I have known that hell before...waiting and wanting to be noticed by the one person you think could help you! Well love you for that matter, Good write! I look forward to reading more of your work. Please stop by and read some of my stuff...I would greatly appreciate it!

Thanks and Peace!
Janice Ann