Forever in Darkness

 

Forever in darkness

Is where I will be,

Because to step out into the light,

Just isn’t me.

 

I have tried and tried again

To be who I’m not,

But heartache at the end of the road

Is all I got.

 

I remove any dark thoughts

That roam through my head,

But instead of feeling better

I just wish harder that I were dead.

 

Happiness is just a stage in life,

One that’s not too keen on me.

The smiles and laughter just silhouettes

Behind which no one cares to see.

 

Tears trickle down

My already tear-stained face.

What is wrong with me?

Why am I such a disgrace?

 

I try to do good,

Try to think only happy thoughts,

But yet in this downward spiral of pain, sorrow and darkness

Is where I am caught.

 

The light of day

Seems to be too good for me,

So forever in darkness

Is where I will be…

 

Copyright©JosieWentzel08July2009

Reviews

[Patrick Ramsey]

The title is spot on! I like that you are unapologetic, and you kind of say, "nah, I've tried the other way and it's fake so forget it." I love how you paint pictures of what people might observe about you, but you still cling to the darkness. But you also show some questioning about your darkness, and wonder if it is indeed the right path, so much so that you feel negative about it for a minute. This makes a reader wonder if you still want to come out of darkness, but feel shame for some reason, or why you feel bad about it. In the poem, that's pretty cool (I think so anyway) because it betrays a lack of arrogance about you're 100% sure of yourself, which is okay. You still cling to darkness, because it is the road that seems to be most authentically you.

Nicely done poem! Not sure that all the conventions are perfect, but you really do pretty good job of connecting.

[Lunar Pup]

this poem is dark yet beautiful