All a Lie

tonight i feel used,
all battered and bruised.
its my heart that’s scarred
my love has been barred.

you came as a friend.
my mind you did bend.
i fell for your smell,
you could so easily compel.

when you took me home
not once did i feel alone.
as you kissed me there
i knew nothing could compare.

but when you said “i’m sorry”
my body grew weary,
to you i said “i’m fine”
but nothing would align.

i lay alone tonight
your words i do recite;
making me feel so utterly wrecked
knowing that to you, i am only a reject.

in the hall at school
i only feel a fool,
but it was you, not me
who came crashing like a sea.

you ripped me apart,
you tore out my heart,
you brought on the assault
saying it was all my fault.

how could you do that?
use me like a life in combat,
you led me so far gone
knowing i was only a pawn

Reviews

[These Haunted Hallways]

Wow. This was really cool. I've felt this wayyy too many times in my life. I completely feel the lonliness, betrayal, and pain in this very much. It's horrible when somebody you like or love just does this to you, and never says a word about anything. Especially when you go all out for them and try ur darndest to win their heart =/ Awesome write tho; really great job with it!! :)

[Andy]

I really like this, its gets the point accross that you feel used. I like the last line :]

[Reaching for the clouds]

This is very good....well done!

[Aravind]

A few concerns, capitalization and punctuation. The punctuation adds a wonderful effect when you try reading it aloud.

Nonetheless, it is very well done. There is great energy throughout the poem. Very amazed at the use of rhymes (elegant) and stanza length consistency.