Icy Dreams

I watch from the window

as icy flakes fall from the sky,

creating a blanket of white on the once green ground.

I place my hand on the glass

and feel a chill spread through my body.

My eyes close for a moment

and I dream of how easy it would be

to go for a walk,

and never return.

To walk into the woods

and just collapse on the ground.

Letting all the sad memories

and depressed feelings take over.

I imagine the tears freezing as they fall down my cheeks.

I'd sit, propped up against a tree,

as white snow covered my lonely body.

And i'd let it.

Looking up at the sky is all i'd do

while the cold took over;

Making me shiver and cry,

until I shivered no more.

Until I was able to close my eyes

and know I'd never have to open them again.

Never have to be sad,

or lonely,

or deprived of happines.

I think of how much easier it would be

to just let go...

 

I open my eyes

and find myself sitting in front of a window

with my hand on the glass.

I let it fall into my lap - limp-

and stare as the color slowely returns to my fingers.

Then I stand, and walk to the door.

Slowely I turn the knob and pull it open.

Stepping out into the cold wind

I start to walk.

Reviews

[These Haunted Hallways]

WOH!! Damn, that was amazing!!! :D I could definitely feel the emotions just pouring out in this scene, and felt like i was there with you, and just taking it all in. The imagery, the sadness, despair, the smell of the bitter cold, and the feeling of wanting to be set free of the pain, is incredibly vivid here. I've felt this a lot. Excellent write!! :)

[Lalli]

Powerful write. Vivid imagery.
Your words captured your loneliness and despair.
Sometimes we just have to write it out...

much love n' respect

-Lalli

[Between the grey]

emotional read here but so well written

[Sophie]

I really am honestly speechless, and after seven hours of being "that quiet girl" at school, that takes quite a lot. Wonderful :)

[~ Stefanie ~]

This was good! Definitely reminds me of myself sometimes... and with winter here now (at least where I'm from) it describes what it is like right outside my window. Well done!

[Time's The Bond]

So deep so emotional yet, slow, I love how I could just naturally read it ever so slowly and how the words just floated into my mind.

But just what inyourshadow said I know you're gonna make snow angels how can you resist? LOL

[Brook Hughes]

Sad and very emotional. But i love how you expressed the emotions in this poem:) Well written and very descriptive. Keep writing:)

[Inyourshadow]

Don't fib you are off to make snow angels not become one lol.

Love the use of inner feelings and the hand upon the pane reflecting your pain.


Keep em' coming

[Calypso]

Nice, well done.