Beating down on me

A Poem by Erika Maass

I don't believe in God a higher being of Glory

Because when I'm at my lowest I think it's all upon me

I am evil

I'm bad

I think too much

I swear too loud

I was born this way

someone's beating down on me.

But where is that when I am happy or kind

I get no drama from the sky

I don't look up and think thank you god

That was I nice thing I did

Feeling the love.

My little girl looks doubtful

As I try to explain

She turns down her mouth

And says to me plain

"I think god is a women, makes no sense he's a man"

She is so strong

I don't want anyone beating her down.

I want to say to her

Life is about luck

And the skills to survive

Love is about fate

And trying all the time

Death will overwhelm you

And changes you to

Birth lasts forever

A golden moment me and you.

God won't be there when you need him the most

But I will be

Even only afterwards

To hold you close.

© 2016 Erika Maass

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eaglepoet

A good thinking poem. The reason I see it this way is because not many people are willing to veer in such a controversial direction. From the first line to the last you are firm in what you're beliefs are. I must admit, that I believe it's easy to criticize or beat down others who don't follow the traditional trajectory of viewpoints. Though I am not a parent, as a young person, I understand the feelings you hold towards your daughters perspective. I am glad that you embrace with an open mind. Great poem.

Posted 8 Years Ago

kitty blur

I love how the last two stanzas rhymed while the rest of the poem did not. It kind of tied the poem up nicely, really gave it a feel of closure. I also enjoyed the story that you told here. It goes from you and your thoughts to how you feel about your daughter - a powerful and beautiful message. Your little girl saying that god is a woman sounds like me when I was younger. :) Glad I could relate to your poem and understand it, too.

Nice piece, overall.