Sleep!

A new side to this writer! x

Sharp and burned and image is set,

Fear and coiled a sickening scream,

Torn and wrenched from Mother's womb,

Frail and flawed a clear bright beam.

 

Caught between a solid and air,

Looking forward through time and light,

Feeling and thoughts covered with loss,

Snapped and focused with one close sight.

 

Questions now answered for you free,

A sleeping future now avails,

Some tired of breezes clenching teeth,

Sound of souls rested for now pre-vails.

Author's Note

Honesty.

Reviews

[The White Wolf]

The first stanza made me think of difficult birth, as if it were surgical, a C-section, but birth none the less. The second stanza made me think about life or being alive but being stuck in a kind of stasis between that and a death-like a photograph. The third stanza made me think of death and the fact that nothing matters in the end because you have found rest. Overall, may I use this word? Epic.

[khalid]

honestly i like it, very nicely written. great job

[Amila Jay]

This is awesome .. Fear and coiled a sickening scream ... Superb write:))

[Aidz]

to dip the quill in another ink, bravo to you good sir :)

[Lawrence Parlier]

Interesting piece.
I like the line "Caught between a solid and air"
The first stanza seemed like you were describing an abortion.
The second stanza seemed like you were talking about reincarnation
The third stanza seemed like it came from a soul that was burned out on enduring both.
Probably way off base but just methinks....
Nice job.

[Sleeping Maiden]

Such a strange birth.. it reminds me of a really difficult birth though...

Creative and unique! =)

Great write!

[Cassie Fraga]

wow!! very creative writing here... interesting read!!

[zero binty]

Sleep escapes my roving mind. What's worse is that when I do, it's filled with dreams that give me no rest.

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

loved this.......glad I am not the only poet attempting to show another side of themselves. Awesome honesty Thomas.........

[AK]

Very nice! I had the same feeling as Follow the Phoenix. Great write!

[Aianarie (INACTIVE)]

Very interesting. I definitely enjoyed reading it.