Sleep!

A new side to this writer! x

Sharp and burned and image is set,

Fear and coiled a sickening scream,

Torn and wrenched from Mother's womb,

Frail and flawed a clear bright beam.

 

Caught between a solid and air,

Looking forward through time and light,

Feeling and thoughts covered with loss,

Snapped and focused with one close sight.

 

Questions now answered for you free,

A sleeping future now avails,

Some tired of breezes clenching teeth,

Sound of souls rested for now pre-vails.

Author's Note

Honesty.

Reviews

[The White Wolf]

The first stanza made me think of difficult birth, as if it were surgical, a C-section, but birth none the less. The second stanza made me think about life or being alive but being stuck in a kind of stasis between that and a death-like a photograph. The third stanza made me think of death and the fact that nothing matters in the end because you have found rest. Overall, may I use this word? Epic.

[Karina]

Another amazing poem! Keep writing!(:

[Lily Mae]

A sense of awakening and rebirth and beautifully expressed..xo

[Crystal Marie Dreier]

I still cant seem to get over how wonderful of a writer you are! This is amazing and I am so glad to know you as a friend and a writer!

[Dayran]

Cultivates the impression of being free from bonds but is as yet tentative. But within its tentativeness is the experience of a new birth whose profundity is just rising to the surface. Nice!

[*~*Butterfly Kisses*~*]

Strong and powerful write. Loved the word play. Nicely done!

[Coyote Poetry]

A good Poet support create reaction and thoughts. You did with this poem. I had to read a few times. You took me a journey with your words. A lot of thoughts and places I went because of the many strong statements. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Brandon S. Whitten]

Honestly, I think you're brilliant, love. Always enjoy an excellent read and write by one of my favorites.

[SuicidePact.]

Interesting, it flowed nicely, your choice in words was well done.

this was marvellous

[Distant horizons]

Reads like a very succinct biography of life. Love the quick flow and rhythm of this. Excellent.

[reflectingus]

Love the flow of rhetorical ideas, the wording is brilliant, powerful, and just intense. This is like a stream of retrospection, a fast flowing river, but with so much description, and that's what I love about your poetry. Every line is worth being quoted, as we quote great writers. This really made me think and wonder a bit, wander a bit more, and the intense burning passion of whatever, that you tuck in each one of your writing is just amazing.