Sleep!

A new side to this writer! x

Sharp and burned and image is set,

Fear and coiled a sickening scream,

Torn and wrenched from Mother's womb,

Frail and flawed a clear bright beam.

 

Caught between a solid and air,

Looking forward through time and light,

Feeling and thoughts covered with loss,

Snapped and focused with one close sight.

 

Questions now answered for you free,

A sleeping future now avails,

Some tired of breezes clenching teeth,

Sound of souls rested for now pre-vails.

Author's Note

Honesty.

Reviews

[The White Wolf]

The first stanza made me think of difficult birth, as if it were surgical, a C-section, but birth none the less. The second stanza made me think about life or being alive but being stuck in a kind of stasis between that and a death-like a photograph. The third stanza made me think of death and the fact that nothing matters in the end because you have found rest. Overall, may I use this word? Epic.

[TKBickel]

To me, this is the struggling journey of birth to death. But that’s my interpretation.
Still a very nice read.

[Jvl narasimharao]

Not an easy poem to understand.But the three stages are wonderfully painted

[CHRIS ANDES]

the words brought unique ideas in every reading
=]

[Belle]

I read this as the Samsara of Buddhism. The Continuous flowing or continuous movement, which explain the cycle of birth, consequently into death or decay wherein no one can not participate. Ah-- true to all. The piece has an excellent subject matter and is written in a very vivid manner.

[Kenneth The Poet]

I definitely need some of that.

[Mark]

As I read this I felt pulled over jagged edges of juxtaposed images smashed together. A very unique write IMO. It speaks to me of a deep darkness filled with strong emotion. I can't say I felt moved by it, but I can say I think it's a great write because of this feeling of being pulled into a fun house of strong emotion.

[>-Eros->]

Three stanzas; birth, life, and death... and the cycle, does it prevail? Nicely arranged concept. Well written,

[Xerclipse]

this summarizes life pretty well. I like the style. keep making more

[RedInk524]

This poem made me think of abortion.. Like, a late term abortion. And considering how daunting of a subject that is for many, myself included, it makes the poem all the more darker. I can see where you are attempting to describe sleep as a period of time in which your soul is only about half in your body and your consciousness is pretty much rampant. But what stuck out the most to me was an abortion, or a bad c section. Either way, this poem is nice and dark. Just how i like them, and my meat.