Wit.

An experiment!

Sparkling wit does stir hatred in this viral mind,

A plucking hand is swift to move upon mine,

Great forces never stand a chance to move him,

Sly grins have found a way to settle in line.

 

Making noises like fantastic farm animals,

I yeild only to pleasure myself only tender,

A wip has use for those that bend to will,

Beauty in paint for masters to come and render.

 

Make haste, make love, make blood to see,

Our hands rest south of tickle lines again,

Casual and meaningless is forever my friend,

To scream and yell and through my out, when?

 

Wispy curls I hate when scrathing upon skins,

Feelings are useless when aired and heal,

Greenery, tankless and glass display your heat,

I must get to you, for only me to feel.

Author's Note

Honesty always!

Reviews

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Excellent flow that has an amazing rhyme scheme, enjoyable read it was!

[freelancejouster]

i love the way this is told. the rhyme makes it feel like a joke and then the rest of it flows differently if you read it like that. i don't know, very interesting. well written, nice work.

[jennifer little]

great write loved reading it thanks for sharing

[hmm]

I love the flow and rhyme scheme,
Simply wonderful write, emotional and well written.

[ur_ginger_girl]

I like it interesting read I like the folw sounds kinda like edgar allen poe though

[patricia]

The first line seemed kind of Shakespearish...
Then it seems to say a bit of humour can stir you better than lofty sentiments.
I sensed a portrayal of a hedonistic lifestyle
I felt this was a meditation on a picture of an animal or something in nature.
I liked the last line best, it ended the poem on a sort of...please hear what I am not saying.
Thankyou and apologies for not knowing what I am talking about...ha ha.

[TheWriter]

I like this =). It was an interesting read! I enjoyed some the ways u described things, "Our hands rest south of tickle lines again." Very nice =)

[♪The Girl Next Do..]

Interesting! I love the way you kind of plucked out certain words and and spun them into your own masterpeice! Good write!

[Priscilla Sayers]

"I must get to you, for only me to feel"... A powerful line.
It actually re-enforces the perception that the man who speaks is seeking only for his pleasure and cares not of the pleasure other. It is well written and can be seen in different perspectives. Nicely done.

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"Feelings are useless when aired and heal"....so true. I really liked this. It has a lot of real insight hidden in the folds of the words. Very, very, good.