Slain

A hat tip to those that feel above us.

Pasted wounds swell and give way to thoughts kept secret,

Laying hands on those not innocent nor evil will be,

A time to know one's self and know what time can do,

A feeling ever masks the eyes and sets nothing but lust free.

 

Devils taunt me and leave nothing for me to feed upon,

Practise makes perfect so flesh must heal to scar and seed,

Farewell to those demons that laugh now behind crosses,

Minors stand crying for mothers that must now go home in reeds.

 

Bleak times, bleak hopes and even bleak house now time has slain,

Fierce faked mouths exspell lieas and truths as if there are,

Same things and never truly cage ears that will not listen,

I'm the same as you I hear all the time, one is on par.

 

Idiots and fools and bankers have much in common and fists,

A man lays down with filth as he sees it may be only be a,

Way to clumber onto riches and gold to adorn his ego,

Take heed to the warning of thousands now gone and away.

Author's Note

Honesty is key.

Reviews

[Ufi Auttorri ~ Amy C. T..]

Why is it that obscure writing ever becomes the heir apparent to the most exquisitely sharpened contrasts? Rhetorically, I suggest it is because of the talent for walking in ever larger circles of perspicuity. He can do no wrong that writes riddles for idiots. But, there is a warm place in our hearts for all fools that warm themselves by setting their clothes ablaze and at the last moment dousing the danger with the tankard of ale remaining in their other hand; before it can more fully illuminate that dire situation.

[Raven Starhawk]

Always a pleasure to read your words. They are delivered so perfectly.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you! x

[Elizabeth Porterfield]

Beautiful as always:)

[Devanshu Rajput]

good write

[Dayran]

A poem that exposes the experience of naivety not yet exposed to the basic practicalities of daily life. Truth is relative and I don't believe any one person has the only key to it. As a society we share our deep truths with each other and find the bridge that connects at the points that it does.

I think I grew up as much this way many years ago but have managed to find a balance with the world and my neighbors. I believe I have returned to understanding my original innocence. I don't think it was wrong to have viewed things that way but it makes a difference to also know what the world is about. It gave me an opportunity to grow.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Hi Thomas, Loved the pathos in this and the message is indeed noble.
Spotted a couple of possible gramatical errors not picked up when you editied it?
2nd line, 3rd stanza should it not be
Fierce faked mouths expel lies and truths as if there are?
2nd and 3rd lines final stanza
A man lays down with filth as he sees it may only be a,
Way to clamber onto riches and gold to adorn his ego, (Clumber is a spaniel)

[Valentine]

Being honest with oneself may be the key..but treating your fellow human being like you would want to be treated..is lacking in so many parts of this world..A very deep and emotional write..Kathie

[Megara]

very emotional and poignant:)

[quinfinn]

as you will no doubt note, i already reviewed this piece a year ago. i still feel it is the same wonderful write as i felt it was then. thank you for considering me again for an opinion on your writing prowess!

[Jyango Ryudo]

I'm impressed bud you outdid yourself with this one, I really like it. I still love your word choices. Keep it up :)