Dawn.

A collective thought process that came to me tonight, ah the inner workings of one's mind.

Slight weight pressed hard upon me,

Those eyes of pain stare forth once,

A shiver of pain slides within my throat,

Relax you snivelling retentive ponce.

 

Light dims the morning calls for us,

No screams link I to he just yet,

My face is locked in resentment no fear,

So stupid the lenghts one goes for a bet.

 

A sign of stopping creeps over the night,

Pain flexes it's right to stay with the dead,

Hate fills the hearts of solemn victims,

Lay down in blood soaked sheets, one bed.

 

Minds wander to the oddest of places,

Praise hope left in fields of bright fawn,

The whisers stay with us in the cold,

It's alwasy darkest before the dawn.

Author's Note

As alwasys be honest.

Reviews

[Jaco (Jaik Miller)]

Pretty cool

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

haunting poem...........it is always darkest before the dawn.....excellent Thomas

[Kenneth The Poet]

Disturbingly rhythmic. It's amazing how easily it goes from light to dark in a split second it seems.

[Fairytale]

A dark delight. This poem had an eerie feel. Nice job.

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

This is a well-crafted write.
It's about something gloomy, isn't it?

[MS. BABy]

I AGREE WITH TERRI, THIS MOVED ME THOUGH IT CASUSED AGGITATION.....GREAT WRITE THOMAS

[Teri B]

My middle name is Dawn...yeah, for real.

Depending on one's perspective, the dawn can be a time of great promise and hope, or a time of great despair. I get some of that dualism here.

[Valentine]

Thomas you write well but you make me worry about your mental state..Hope you are waiting fopr Dawn happily and not wishing it to never come again..Kathie

[Seshat Nidaba]

I enjoyed this modern take on Dawn, it had a contemporary cynical tone that at first annoyed me but near the end of the piece, it felt like I could accept the pain of mortality more with the metaphor.

[Shep]

I think this poem has some thing to do with waiting to die. If right then this poem was awesome if wrong then I was confused