Woman.

A subject craferd by many, this is my mere interprtation.

Why must I? Indeed they speak to you of promises that fly in the face of reason. I am not the worker ant of your hive my dear sweet fellow. Time begins tonight and you have an air of honesty that one find’s deplorable to reasoned thinking. Arrogance drives the ship of your mind and yet you kneel to those the same as you, or indeed ones that hide and claim brother hood.

 

You speak of destiny and fore told attitudes to species not created and you expect me to blindly afford you the right of superior wisdom. You're a fool, not onto intellect but to the survival of races to come. You not only serve a masked master, but lay the foundations of misery for all my kind. Millions, over eons will be tired, murdered and preyed upon because of your sense of unfounded weakness.

If we are to bear the minions to slay this planet are you not to bear fruit for the others, for the war of all mankind are forth coming, that is the only real absolute. He made us from grains of sand and yet you feel your sand more gritted than mine own. That and only that show your arrogance, debauched sulks plague your very existence and I mock you, for you are truly laughable.

From now, and until the end of time, I will never, true are my words, lay beneath you. You, my dearest Adam are no more than a construct for thousands and millions of brutal men to come, and I am your true equal, for I give birth to the woman to fight your stupidity, my weapon is the most deadly of all - knowledge, remember only one thing my sworn enemy, my name, Lilith!

Author's Note

Be honest.

Reviews

[reflectingus]

This is amazing. So expressive, and powerful, you have conveyed your vexation towards this woman, with perfect words, creating an artistic flow. I see your vocabulary is quite powerful, great job with that, and seriously, this is such a great way to let it all out.

[Marie Harrison]

I love it!
The intesity and passion
felt in this write is off the charts,
it forces the reader to lean in
to the words. Of course the
ending is perfection!

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

This almost sounds like my husband's mind. I guess we women are a little bit complicated to understand sometimes. I'm a handful, or so I'm told. haha, but I think you did good with this piece. I enjoyed it. Great Write!

[Samantha ~virginpoet]

brilliant Thomas
well done

[masqued_muse]

Second paragraph, correct"because" spelling. 3rd paragraph, after "others"..comma needed? Then; after"That"..a semicolon needed, "plague" misspelled. 4th. paragraph, after "time"...a semicolon needed. After"Adam"...semicolon needed. Whole sentence MAY be too much of a run on, and..."knowledge" misspelled. ( I am half asleep, here).
But after all that is edited my friend; this is probably one of the most brilliant, passionate dissertations on Lilith, I have ever read. Rest assured, Thomas...CONTENT lacks nothing, here.
You asked for honesty...hope this helps.

[Kenneth The Poet]

I like this. Womankind truly is the fairer sex.

[Coyote Poetry]

Some mystery are never to be known. Woman is one of them. I have three daughter and six sisters. Each different as night and day. I did my best to get along. Adam isn't to blame for this mess we are in. His days of power and deeds are gone. Now we have the Bush's and Obama thinking they know all and the world need the USA. World would be fine if overbearing countries leave the countries alone in their private crisis. I enjoyed your tale. There is no real answer to this story.
Coyote

[Carrollann]

This seems very abstract, poetic, if I'm not mistaken. I've never been good at such rich language, even from the most world renouned writers, and I find it difficult to sift through, however, beautiful to read. This type of abstract imagery has always been difficult for me to completely grasp while reading and I find my mind soar afterward from the effort I put in trying to fully understand the main story line taking place. Yet I enjoyed the piece. The picture that went along with the writing made me have an inclination from the start as to the topic of the writing that would follow, but I am not sure I made the connection. Yet I will admit I don't know a lot about the late Amy Winehouse so that might contribute to my ignorance on the topic. Moreover, as I said the rich language, while thick, is beautiful. If I may be so bold, I would compare this story to a piece of chocolate cake, moist, full of flavor, but you need a glass of cold milk to go with it in order to not be overwhelmed by the decadence so you can truly enjoy the desert.

[Miss Marie Riorden.]

Not exactly sure I understood this. Seeming as if I'm half out of it. I feel rude, but 2nd paragraph. Second sentence it's "You're a fool."
3rd paragraph first sentence is bear, not bare.
Last paragraph just a typo. It's and.

On the actual reading tho, it's pretty good. I love how you start this all with a question instead of a sentence. It's a nice inviter. It reads alright. It could be a great interpretation, but since I've not any others I wouldn't really know. My favorite line is "Indeed they speak to you of promises that fly in the face of reason." because that could go either way.

-Marie-
P.S. I feel like Grammar Nazi now.. lol