Woman.

A subject craferd by many, this is my mere interprtation.

Why must I? Indeed they speak to you of promises that fly in the face of reason. I am not the worker ant of your hive my dear sweet fellow. Time begins tonight and you have an air of honesty that one find’s deplorable to reasoned thinking. Arrogance drives the ship of your mind and yet you kneel to those the same as you, or indeed ones that hide and claim brother hood.

 

You speak of destiny and fore told attitudes to species not created and you expect me to blindly afford you the right of superior wisdom. You're a fool, not onto intellect but to the survival of races to come. You not only serve a masked master, but lay the foundations of misery for all my kind. Millions, over eons will be tired, murdered and preyed upon because of your sense of unfounded weakness.

If we are to bear the minions to slay this planet are you not to bear fruit for the others, for the war of all mankind are forth coming, that is the only real absolute. He made us from grains of sand and yet you feel your sand more gritted than mine own. That and only that show your arrogance, debauched sulks plague your very existence and I mock you, for you are truly laughable.

From now, and until the end of time, I will never, true are my words, lay beneath you. You, my dearest Adam are no more than a construct for thousands and millions of brutal men to come, and I am your true equal, for I give birth to the woman to fight your stupidity, my weapon is the most deadly of all - knowledge, remember only one thing my sworn enemy, my name, Lilith!

Author's Note

Be honest.

Reviews

[reflectingus]

This is amazing. So expressive, and powerful, you have conveyed your vexation towards this woman, with perfect words, creating an artistic flow. I see your vocabulary is quite powerful, great job with that, and seriously, this is such a great way to let it all out.

[John Patrick Robbins AK..]

Honestly my friend a truely brillant write i do indeed love the way you deliver a write I raise my glass to this one cheers my friend keep posting

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a creative and powerful prose giving Lilith that edge that she always commands..was a little thrown by the Amy Winehouse picture but can see the comparisons and the start beehive references..

[FJ Davis]

Bible-inferred and "other book"-named bad girl, Lilith.
An intriguing rant purportedly by an often feared figure hailing from the dark mists of one very distant past; a rant decidedly resentful, clearly rebellious and not a little hateful.
Fascinating premise; interesting read.

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

they say this is what got Lilith thrown out :) great read Thomas!

[Seshat Nidaba]

I like the wandering, prophetic and surreal tone to this. It vaguely reminded me of William Blake for some reason.

The sinful appearence of Lilith at the end, was rather entertaining for me.

I find it frustrating at times the importance women place in having children, above all else, and in a sense, this piece reminded me of that.

[obvious pseudonym]

i' ma little stupid and didn't understand half of it. it may be because i am not a religious person but i love the end.
"my weapon is the most deadly of all - knowledge" true so true. it's the best weapon against all those who have made my life hell at school. you can fight with brawn sure but the true power lies with your brain

[Shep]

Love the story it remind me of a beehive as the queen bee tries to understand her new lover before she kills him. My favorite line: You not only serve a masked master, but lay the foundations of misery for all my kind.

All my kind is the key word of this short story. As she argues why we are a live and what we become. Awesome Job; looking forward to more of writings and your reviews my sweet little Bee.

[Robin]

Most excellent ! the last stanza a roar !

[Shardbearer99]

Okay, I like what you're trying to do with this. It does need work, though. I like the idea that you've created. There's that strong sense of an independent woman burning with an intense passion for retribution. I love your use of vocabularly, but you need to watch your punctuation. I think with a little editing and more work this coule definitely be something to keep an eye on. But keep up the good work though!

[Pikey.B*****d]

very true. very wonderful job!