Cut!!

Just a little fun on this Monday morning, I hope you are entertained!

The first cut washes pain from my urge,

Fire eats at the flesh like bacon burnt,

Castrated youth leaves no detail in me,

Urine comes alive with an electric current.

 

Slide nails in skin as deep as you need,

Failed tests a science to quake her foot,

Liquid pus absolves guilt of the suits,

Plunge hookes within the swelled gut.

 

Intestines squirm as maggotts in my hand,

A fetish known only to those of death row,

Magical high's are smelled by those fortunate,

A larks sounds will never silence the crow.

 

Breath stinking after meals of the dirty,

Tense ache hightens more a mere run,

No doubt or remorse expressed in my soul,

For its all in the end, just creepy fun.

Author's Note

I love you all, have fun!

Reviews

[Miss Marie Riorden.]

Ghastly, in a good way of course.
"The first cut washies pain from my urge,
Fire eats at the flesh like bacon burnt,"
Odd simile here, but it's alright. Descriptive enough you know. I could agree with it knowing that feeling.
Btw. 3rd stanza, first line. Maggots.
I like how haunting and dark this is too.

-Marie-

[Coyote Poetry]

To cut the skin leave me concern for pain and the misery a sharp knife can cause. The word direct and very detail. You create a interesting poem. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Valentine]

You have a funny way of showing love to me or yourself.......yukkkkkkkk

[M.Babu]

What a unique entertainingly mind haunting piece you crafted here.

Pricks the gag reflex and laughter.

:D

~M.Babu~

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Horror phrases of brillant lines that has a dark side that entertain the soul so to speak! Excellent reading

[Jaco (Jaik Miller)]

HAHA! Love it!

[Libby]

Beautifully repulsive. The imagery is brilliant.

[Calypso]

Nice one.

[Linear]

It's kinda funny how I read these words, for the horror is written within the illness, that spreads by intercourse be it verbal or otherwise, while those having fun even whilst under the gun so to speak, care not a single jot for those they entertain....:0)



















Ps.....the poem of mine you reviewed was just trash is all, which is most all I write, but not quite all ;0-

[obvious pseudonym]

ohh maggots so horrible and yet so great. i love the "bacons burnt" part. the words you write make my brain come a light with imaginary

[stars are far]

This was really so great :D