Plum Lips.

I have been told that although I may be a good writer and poet, I rarely tackle one of the true inspirations for writers everywhere - love, so here goes, be warned, it may not be by best.

My thoughts frail the edges of memory,

Our glass is stained plum with sweetness,

You pour hearts into kisses on my lips,

Touched in hands soft rounded kindness.

 

A prayer of bodies wrapped in sweat,

The eyes see souls inside all creation,

May Gods of new bless willing hearts,

Amen to hopes come through reaction.

 

Emotion and talent swing clocks of time,

Dates and scenes crave important few,

Lead faith an softness behind my heart,

Drained spirits renewed again the two.

 

Lights flicker in windows now old and grey,

Colours fade yet stay fresh as we tend,

I love you my friend, my lover, my man,

Now join my being we will never end.

Author's Note

Be honest, try not to be to harsh!

Reviews

[Rene Velez]

Love poems are not easy, I stay away from them when I can, but this is good, the thing is with love poems, the less you say the more power they have, imagery is a way of giving thoughts of what you want to say, that make any sense? anyway it's a good read, enjoyable.

[M.Babu]

I really enjoy your phrasing...they carry with them a certain class that is oft lost when crafting a love poem...

"A prayer of bodies wrapped in sweat,
The eyes see souls inside all creation,
May Gods of new bless willing hearts,
Amen to hopes come through reaction"

I'm always amazed by that...
Well i'm seeing below that many people are afraid to write love poems cause they're either too hard or "cliche"...this should definitely encourage them...not too cliche or even at all my friend!

Good one!!

~M.Babu~

[Kenneth The Poet]

Yeah, the reviews you receive are justified by this piece of work. You do not suck as a writer. You write in a rhythmic style that induces envy.

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

I try to stay away from love poems because not only do I think of them as bit cliche in a way, i'm terrible at writing them myself. But I think you pulled it off with this one. Not bad at all. Great Write!

[Andrea Vargas]

Wow you know i havent been on in such along time and coming back and seeing that your writing is still amazing is just fantastic! Great job(:

[Coyote Poetry]

No weakness in this poem my Poet and writer friend. Just a tender and warm desire to know peace and happiness.
"Lead faith an softness behind my heart,
Drained spirits renewed again the two."
Thank you for the amazing poem.
Coyote

[brenda]

MY COMMENT WILL NEVER BE HARSH I LOVE IT !:)

[SpokenWord]

So many of your poems seem to touch a little of the spirit as some of your spirituality shines through in words of acceptance and other things I won't mention since this is a love poem after all. Love is always an amazing thing when it is shared openly and honestly and you have captured its beauty here.

[Muse]

Sexy and written with such grace. Well done!

[Megan Step]

I love, love poems:) they always give me a warm and fuzzy feeling inside. This poem is wonderful. aboslutly love it.
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[Wolf's Dark Song]

I like it. To me, the imagery is tender and romantic. The style makes me think of the style the Masters used. I enjoyed the read and think you did a good job on this.