Letter of the Un-forgiven.

A study of those blind to faith and reason.

Slated stone crushed under a worn foot,

 walking lands as arcane to travelling new,

Poised plants sully the roads of old,

 doctors failed those praying on few.

Tattered houses align a single mile,

 discussions hushed and silence the young,

Broken memories kill the very heart,

 the old women with a woven and vinyl tongue.

A low rise hill holds the death of saints,

 women mourn and cry tears for all,

Pictured captured in scenes slackened,

 more hopes are needed to reach the tall.

Failed fears of children scream loose,

 bright stars have fallen on those men,

A door held open for and by the divine,

 Simple thoughts are key in time ten.

Author's Note

Read and re-read at your will, it is a new style and a new look at an old theme.

Reviews

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

I'm not sure, but I may have noticed some minor errors within the piece, but regardless I think I got the jist of this after a couple of reads. IMHO, I think their are more people way too open to faith and reason, and bring religiousness a little too far and insane...while others dont have enough. Not sure if I'm making sense, religion is a touchy subject but I thought this was a great write.

[patricia]

ps...The title? couldnt get its connection , hope you inbox me what it realy is all about. Thanks...

[patricia]

I even read all your reviews to this to see if theirs helped my understanding, but in the end I can only give it my own understanding...so here goes and sorry if it offends.
The first stanza is to me when the disciples of jesus didnt have enough faith to cast out demons, and jesus had to do the job, and he explained you had to fast as well in that kind of healing. the poised plant made me think of the withered fig tree. but could mean the original open minds of children to faith.
The second stanza says to me that something upset the children, they felt left out of their parents discussions...the old woman with the woven and vinyl tongue was my favourite line...may have been some woman who was manipulative.
The third stanza to me is...Calvary and the women around the cross. and the cause of saints following in the cross.
the last stanza is vague to me.. the closest I can come is it means ...keep it simple, love is all there is... children will respond to what we do rather than what we say.
The poem on the whole might be saying religious people, sometimes do more bad than good when they live in extremes, and are impeding by standing in Gods light.
sorry I did my best. Thanks.

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I got a few distinct images while reading this. I get a very vivid picture with this poem. I get the sense that the innocent and vulnerable have been left in a sort of state of disrepair, crying for help, hoping for a healing that never comes, and are left to fend for themselves. It could be my own perception, but to me, when I read this, I feel abandonment with a kind of child-like hope. This was one of my favorite reads. It really spoke to me. Very nice job.

[Wendy Seames Garner]

I'm not sure I could understand this peom, I am new to poetry. At first I thought there might be a reference to Jesus dying on the cross, then I just wasn't sure. I hate to ask this, Thomas, but could you explain it for me a little?

[megan brooks]

It's wonderful!! I love it! I also love the word choice very much!

[Tomislav Petricevic]

Wow! Amazing! I hope that one day I can be at least close to being as good as you are! I admire you, man.

[jennifer little]

wonderful poetry great job i give you a100 on rating

[Priyanka Natesh]

You're right.I had to read and re-read to get a gist.It's a new style.Powerful lines.Great work!Thank you :)

[swati]

Liked the style...the way you have used every word..everything interwoven delicately!! Indeed too different

[Mika Haruna]

a very different poem from the norm, but i loved it none the less, your words rang true, great write
(srry, i suck at giving reviews!)