Marius!

A fleeting prose to a fictional character that I have come to love.

A beautiful creature of magical light,

Snatched from his mother's hands,

Without warning or alarm or goodbye,

A son though man, my dark angel.

The protector of the ancient ones,

True, spirited and yearning for peace,

A lover of those powerful few,

A loving heart of a killer, my killer.

Never even, what dies was innocence,

Not human for decades, how peaceful,

A diet of blood for eternity,

A cemented block in timeless age.

My lover, my priest, my teacher,

A tormented soul of the soulless,

Laughing screams of children,

An immortal with mortal dreams.

Author's Note

A weak wording prose for a man, a fictional man who I have come to love and fear.

Reviews

[Pencrafter]

Your poem portrays a colorful story in succinct lines. A dark, tragic, character emerges from a sinister, unloving world, which frequently happens in real life. As usual, your words are lucid and potent, with stark imagery. The four short verses are manageable bites of cognitive material, giving the reader much to ponder.

[Helen Crutchett]

Very unsettling and decidedly dark and scary. Definately a "shivers down the spine" write! Well done. Thank you for submitting this to my contest! ~ Helena :)

[Mark]

"A loving heart of a killer, my killer." I see a tragic power that was twisted out of an innocent soul.

Sometimes your work is very opaque to me, but it is always strong and powerful.

[Maya Storm]

Fav line: 'A diet of blood for eternity, A cemented block in timeless age.' That was beautifully penned.

The beginning is so far from the ending, but when I read it again is all made sense. This is a well crafted piece you got me to read it twice :)

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Amazing piece, after reading it i am curious to know more about Marius. You always write interesting pieces. Id love a day inside your head xxxxx

[silver threaded queen]

I thought of this as a story, an epic of sorts if you will, loved the metaphors in here, and the perspective of which you wrote it from.... great write!!

[Marissa]

very very nice!

[johnnyqueer]

This is gorgeous.

[Aianarie (INACTIVE)]

Excellent poetry. I enjoyed every line.

[CHRIS ANDES]

you've come up with such marvellous piece =]

[Raven Starhawk]

You have a majestic pen. This was a enticing yet...I don't know the word for it...but this has emotion attached to it, love and angst...it is a solid combination for exquisite writing.