Innocent.

To the former child that was me.

Behind a silver door does speak,

An owl of burning ember beaks,

A soft touch feather touches they sight,

Does fly up home alone at night,

The howling wolf you hear his call,

Blood soaked teeth he does fall,

Evil eyes he stops and stares,

Growling first to be oh so fair,

Beast of sky, beast of mount,

Whirl thy wind on every count,

Cracking house on rock tops,

Empty sirens that never stop,

Boneless body that slides and flops,

Hear the innocent heart go pop.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

I miss the day of being young. I remember reading the Jack London books. Dreaming of the wildness and freedom. (I was raised in the city of Detroit.) I like the poem. With my 15 years in the Army. It gave me the opportunity to be in the woods and learn to respect the animals. Last line is a old man dream.
"Hear the innocent heart go pop."
A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Fragilebrokendreams]

Wow, it is simple and yet it is that last line that really makes me feel that inside. It is very well done, an excellent read!

[roy mccarthy]

nice poem,
i like the simple line and easy to follow rhyme cadence also!

[pamzilla. &hear..]

This reminded me of the Dr. Seuss books sitting on my bookshelf with its simple rhymes.
However, simple rhymes or not, this is still an excellent poem.
..I think I may just re-read it :)

[Sean Eddingfield]

Like a demented Dr. Seuss... I like.

[RidingTheWind]

My favourite part is definitely the last line :) It works as a conclusion to the entire poem and makes a nice ending.

[E.Gleaves]

Yes, the wolf's howl being heard is a great use of foreshadowing and then the beast as they whirl in struggle gives this version a lot more balance.

[E.Gleaves]

The two lines are almost magical. It's like entering into a world of nature and imagination. But As the poem continues that innocence you speak of gets corrupted. This is powerful stuff.You've succeeded in telling a whole story in a few short lines. To make this write even better maybe consider incorporating a clash between evil and innocence. It doesn't have 2 epic ( one line would suffice) but it would give the poem a more defined beginning middle and end.

[LA Lorena]

I see this as a dark coming of age story, one that is all too familiar for me. Too many can recall that exact moment in time when childhood innocence died. This is sad and tragic on just so many levels.