Afreet.

A plunging exercise to gain my legs again in the world of religion, demons and the human need to find those which need to be left alone!

Azul windows pierce through thickened veils,

The studied mind seeks thrills to fuel his desire,

What sound shall the youth bellow to the night’s sky?

Sharpened eyes drip crimson like wild fire.

 

Fearing the afreet a most pointless effort,

As he desires one thing during one’s apoptosis,

The hunt, that race to soothe the loins' quick,

Well after all the story reeks time in Genesis.

 

Cantillate you damn holy men from inside the spire,

Blood is the only key to help us now and forever,

Sins of the flesh - is there any other kind?

A single blow to the neck will lead to never.

 

A final caution to those of pure degraded peace,

There is no such thing and you’ll find but one,

Stories have a way of telling a single honest truth,

You lie through gasconade now I tell you are gone!

Author's Note

Honesty as always my darling readers x

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

first verse is incredible ..absolutely drew me in ...the blood cries of youth ..yes...i can remember ;) but this is something more ..an afreet .. some menace is afoot
pointless to fear the demon ..love that ..such sound wisdom says i ..not sure about the meaning in this line:
" Well after all the story reeks time in Genesis.' but i can draw impressions from it
"Sins of the flesh - is there any other kind?" ... yes there are i must respond (you did ask you know) :))
"....pure degraded peace," very interesting wording .... degraded peace seems a bit convoluted to me .. second to last line is fantastic to me ...last line is puzzling "...now i tell you are gone" ..do you mean now i tell you to go? strength in the quatrains and rhyming fits the theme i think .. love the language ..thank you for several new words for me .. i read it several times as felt there is a lot in it and did not want to miss something ..so you hooked me pretty good and have me pondering several of those lines
E.
ps didn't mean to get so wordy ;}

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

I adore "wordy" - thank you for the review, the reference to Genesis is the first known written text of the "Afreet", and many, many sins come and go, the ones of the flesh though leave scars! Again thank you.

[Einstein Noodle]

:) ..................

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

lovely vocabulary - makes this poem seem more intense

[Ted Kniffen]

Like Lydia there were a few words that needed clarification. Once understood they certainly conveyed a dark menace. I particularly like obscure villains or demons that threaten existence. Your Djinn fulfills that role here quite well. Very well done.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you Ted.

[andrew mitchell]

a dark well written piece i felt like i was reading the mind of jack the ripper. sorry about the small print , coffee in one hand lol. you write so damn well.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you AM

[Pryde Foltz]

You have such an adept way of delivery the dark with just enough sharp edges. Great, great work, Thomas:)

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you PF

[Coyote Poetry]

You need to write a book. Maybe a Jack London short story kind. I enjoyed this tale. Filled with actions and deeds leaving the reader wanting more.
"A final caution to those of pure degraded peace,
There is no such thing and you’ll find but one,
Stories have a way of telling a single honest truth,
You lie through gasconade now I tell you are gone!"
The above lines. I could write a epic tale from. Thank you Thomas for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Wow thank you my darling CP

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Thomas.

[DoormanDan]

"Pure, degrade peace" I'm guessing refers to ignorance, both intentional and unintentional. Anyway, this poem is definitely very well written. It's intricate in both vocabulary and meaning, and I can tell that you put a lot of thought and effort into it. You use of various religious and scientific terminology adds yet another layer to it, perhaps to, in a way, showcase either the conflict between both science and religion or maybe even a small, common truth between them? Regardless, I definitely enjoyed this piece, and can definitely respect it (and you as a writer, for that matter). Keep up this awesome work! :)

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you doormandan

[Sapientiam]

This is very well written. The words seemed to sway so peacefully, yet, strongly through the lines, conveying different emotions each time. There seems to be a conflict over what is pure or impure (I could be wrong) and I love it. Thanks for sharing this!

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Indeed, thank you.

[Lydia Shutter]

Had to look up some of the words...thanks for expanding my vocabulary. Have to say, I doubt I will use those words though. A lot of anger in the lines....and more than a bit scary if you ask me. Still, a well written poem. Lydi*

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you Lydia.

[William Liston]

Well, I definitely learned some new words by reading this. I really enjoyed reading this. I like it whenever poets use different types of punctuation--not just periods. With that being said, I like how you used the rhetorical question in the third line and the exclamation mark in the last--it really helped to emphasize the emotion behind this piece. Good job.

-William Liston

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you William