Vanished.

A prose to ponder and fear for the weekend!

A slight tremble crosses lashes closed,

Bright souls leave this gaol of flesh,

No hope is often the worst of all,

Clear silence has heaped in on mesh.

Dark and smog smother your body,

Breath falls heavy on my naked nape,

Grunting lasts for times unknown now,

No pleading for life just Eden's grape.

An apple of Sodom lays heavy in veins,

Sleeping comes so quick between aches,

Ticking sounded by bone not of clock,

Those nails leaving cuts like sharpened rakes.

Never fear those gone or to come in your stead,

They too have dreams to be banished,

A monster he may be we all know that,

In time my sweet we all shake and are vanished.

Author's Note

Honesty my darlings x

Reviews

[BThomvanWart]

At first when I read this, I was not entirely positive it connected right in my mind. I read it a few more times and it still doesn't feel like I got the right notion. Funny, right? Here's where my mind went while reading this; At first, I just got this dark, smoky image. And then I shivered. Literally, your work gave me goosebumps. There's something in this piece that I truly love. Although my perception of your work is more of feelings I can't describe, I do have to say that I love it. Very well done.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

You are to kind x

[Brittany Zedalis]

Wow. Very well done. Very deep.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you x

[Sami Khalil]

You have delved deep, sailed wide, flew high on the wings of wisdom and truth. I like the imagery of sharpened rakes the most. Very unique...All good though...Grazie Mille for sharing...:)........

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you Sami, you are a good friend x

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure...Any time...:).....................

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

x x x have a great weekend

[Sami Khalil]

You too...:).........................

[A. Amos]

Never fear those gone or to come in your stead,
They too have dreams to be banished,
A monster he may be we all know that,
In time my sweet we all shake and are vanished.

So true this is how life is.... This is how time is.....
Enjoyed!

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you A. Amos x

[Ruth]

There is a darkness but also a delving...Thomas, you weave a mighty and thoughtful piece x

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you Poppy, always a pleasure! x

[Coyote Poetry]

You said a lot in the poem.
'Never fear those gone or to come in your stead,
They too have dreams to be banished,"
The lines above are true. Can't fear what we left behind. No weakness in the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you Coyote, I adore you x

[Frieda P]

As per your deep poetry, colored in dark hues of dread Thomas, you had to put these notions in my head didn't you, can't help yourself I know. Always a brilliant read love.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you Frieda, you know I like injecting that loving soul of yours with my unique dark spirit!

[Frieda P]

I have enough dark love, are you trying to kill me? ;-)

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Merely making you stronger darling!

[Frieda P]

Ha what a guy!

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

I try, I try!

[Lyn Anderson]

I didn't read the note before I read the poem, and I think my interpretation is a little different because of that, nevertheless, a beautifully written and formatted verse, with much to ponder.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you KL my darling, always a pleasure x