Vanished.

A prose to ponder and fear for the weekend!

A slight tremble crosses lashes closed,

Bright souls leave this gaol of flesh,

No hope is often the worst of all,

Clear silence has heaped in on mesh.

Dark and smog smother your body,

Breath falls heavy on my naked nape,

Grunting lasts for times unknown now,

No pleading for life just Eden's grape.

An apple of Sodom lays heavy in veins,

Sleeping comes so quick between aches,

Ticking sounded by bone not of clock,

Those nails leaving cuts like sharpened rakes.

Never fear those gone or to come in your stead,

They too have dreams to be banished,

A monster he may be we all know that,

In time my sweet we all shake and are vanished.

Author's Note

Honesty my darlings x

Reviews

[BThomvanWart]

At first when I read this, I was not entirely positive it connected right in my mind. I read it a few more times and it still doesn't feel like I got the right notion. Funny, right? Here's where my mind went while reading this; At first, I just got this dark, smoky image. And then I shivered. Literally, your work gave me goosebumps. There's something in this piece that I truly love. Although my perception of your work is more of feelings I can't describe, I do have to say that I love it. Very well done.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

You are to kind x

[Ghost of Jupiter]

Brilliantly frightful... loved each well crafted line that sent chills down the spine... well done.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you.

[Konigin]

Fantastic. It stuck in my mind for a long while after I read it! Great job! I loved the part:

Dark and smog smother your body,
Breath falls heavy on my naked nape,

:)

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you.

[Konigin]

Your Welcome! ^.^

[K.N. Lorenzen]

You are wild,witty, venomous, vital and wonderful! That's all, for now.

K.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you K.N. x

[Vidya Bacchus]

This was very interesting Thomas.Who knows what if anything the hereafter holds for us ?Makes you think it does.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you x

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are welcome :)

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

And death is inevitable for all of us, hence we will all vanish at one point or another. And who knows if death will be as gruesome as you portray it to be?

Interesting read.
xx

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

I hope so, thank you x

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goes Cascading!)]

my pleasure

[Ayvid N]

Deep, dark and disturbing. It made for an intersting read.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you x

[Jack...]

Do we find it or does it find us, walking that path to an ending of reasonable course and unknown future. Very cool Thomas

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you Jack

[Blue]

"Never fear those gone or to come in your stead,
They too have dreams to be banished,
A monster he may be we all know that,
In time my sweet we all shake and are vanished."

I'm comforted and scared at the same time. Thannks for sharing your profound thoughts. :)

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you x

[Poetic Beauty]

Time always moves and in the end we all move out of this world. I believe onto hesaven/hell depending on ones spirit but this shows the mortality of life. We can't live forever and as time goes on our bones ache and your bodies wither. We can not stop it all we can do is live life to the fullest and be healthy but that just prolongs the inevitable.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you x