"Thin lashes look darker in a time of moisture and emotion,
Shaking departure of skittish men an uneasy alliance.
A tiny finger is all that guards ones face against the world,
Brushing droplets way on cheeks now pink and heated,"
All the lines are good in this poem and all the expressions are wonderful. I agree with Chris a lot on his point...Marvelous work....:)
"Thin lashes look darker in a time of moisture and emotion,
Shaking departure of skittish men an uneasy alliance.
A tiny finger is all that guards ones face against the world,
Brushing droplets way on cheeks now pink and heated,"
All the lines are good in this poem and all the expressions are wonderful. I agree with Chris a lot on his point...Marvelous work....:)
Tears are so many emotions, joy, truth, sorrow, all purging of the soul, sometimes endings, other's signify new beginnings. You blew me away with this one, the gentler side of Thomas, love it my friend.
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
Thank you
11 Years Ago
I'm always overjoyed when I don't have to cringe, just saying ;-)
A detailed description of a powerful event painted in a poem. Tears have many colours and yesterday I held the desperate tears of someone I love and they were washing away years of unhappiness.
Thomas, every time I open one of your pieces, I prepare to have the ever-loving wind knocked out of me. I am absolutely astonished and mesmerised by this beautiful piece.
It flows, it sings, it touches a very deep part of me and I thank you for that.
There are a few whoopsies but who cares when such emotion is pasted for the world to drink!
yes, it is better to just let it out...yes, there is the aftermath, the clues of the cry left for all to see...but there is a purging...a catharsis that happens because of those tears...we cry them and then start anew..
some spelling editing in spots needed, but a beautifully written poem...
To all who know by now - I love you.
For those that don't, I review a lot of work on here, and I expect the same in return, friend me but make sure to have conviction! I'm a horror writer mostly bu.. more..