Sharp Bite!

Just me trying to get back to what I'm great at - horror poetry - give me time! enjoy!

The perfect lines trap droplets of salty sweat that lingers on my tongue,

Pink flesh waits like whipped cream beneath a tort sheet of new skin,

Perfumes from bottles bought at the finest houses of Paris and London,

Licking softly you tremble just to tease me as noise ends with the drop of a pin.

 

Nibble and suck as time reveals a slight red and purple haze on that neck,

A guide of sorts for men like me we use to land the final stroke we want,

Hands wander over your stomach tight muscles to hold fast upon strength,

That groin stirring not yours of course but mine that anticipation the font.

 

Moments come and moments go fast so savour your time with this creature,

Sharp incisors pierce through that landing of colour to the food flowed fast,

Red nectar fills my horrid mouth drops filter over hungry lips to stain my face,

Heads spin your heart pounds in rhythm with my fingers tightening go past.

 

Allow you to go and leave a lonely planet and remember this is for another,

A being kept young and subtle a beauty for others to ponder in eternity bound,

Hollow succour I understand my darling how a fist kiss can end happiness,

Slump down to the filthy ground now a memory to those until your body is found.

Author's Note

I'm trying to get back to being me - I hope you enjoy.

Reviews

[unsavable_soul]

I absolutely love this. This captures the seductive nature vampires have long been known for. I thank you for the request on this one. I ask may I place it in my library,please?
You greatly portray also the strong ideas and almost sentiments of that being, the sensual nature, means the beast of the hunt. I will say I think I see a couple issues if your interested. This is very strong, compelling I am not sure in a way if I want to be the beast or the prey.
Excellent.
Christopher

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

By all means Chris - go for it, and to be honest I'm not sure if I want to be beast or prey either!

[unsavable_soul]

not sure what I thought was wrong, I read it again and I see nothing. It's 3:am here my mental lethargy has turned into down right mental decay... sorry friend. This piece is perfect as is, forgive my late night mistake.
Chris

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

When affections turns to obsession the results can be horrific.
A pulse quickening read.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you!

[Rogue]

The last two lines of this really make this an exceptional piece of work.
Wonderful progression from beginning to end.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you!

[Dream Weaver]

It started out as a sensually charged spitfire.
Then it got twisted into a dark corridor of WTF?
Then it left me scratching my head? I think I like
it......

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thats just hte reaction I strive to induce, thank you! x

[Dream Weaver]

You're quite welcome Thomas!

[Emerald Seas]

Ah, now this is the Thomas I remember! A dark and intriguing read that quickens the pulse and has us enthralled and a little petrified, with no desire to escape until the end.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you my love - it's good to back!

[Emerald Seas]

Good to see you again! :) I'm not around as much as I used to be, but still jumping in to read more than I am to write - hugs!

[Baby Ricochet]

I like how it starts off with heavy sexual overtones and transforms into a homicide, Great work THomas

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thanks BR - I'm getting back to my roots!

[Sami Khalil]

"Allow you to go and leave a lonely planet and remember this is for another,

A being kept young and subtle a beauty for others to ponder in eternity bound,

Hollow succour I understand my darling how a fist kiss can end happiness,

Slump down to the filthy ground now a memory to those until your body is found."
Those lines were outstanding but I like the whole poem too. Pen on with that creative pen...:)

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you Sami! x

[Sami Khalil]

Always welcome...:)

[Deuces]

Unique and great are the two words that come to mind. The first person romantic, sensual yet scary point of view from a vampire who seduces and then lays his victims to rest. I love these kinds of pieces because they tap into the surreal, yet still hold onto the eroticism we all love to read.

Always impressed, Sir!

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you my darling.

[Frieda P]

Gulp, you scare me....it's suggestive and dark, yet lovely somehow. I'm not even sure how I feel at this moment in time. Good read, it brought a shiver down my spine.

[quinfinn]

Thomas is renown for his beautiful and terrifying vampire stories....

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

I'm glad you enjoyed it - there will be more to come - that was a mere taste! x

[Frieda P]

I guess I'll put my big girl pants on for the next one! ;-) x

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

lololol - Indeed!

[Frieda P]

xD

[quinfinn]

well, this is a beginning which speaks of abject desire and lustful passion and then emerges, ever so gently, into a world of macabre intentions. yep! Thomas is back with a vengeance! third line/second stanza...did you mean "wander"? this is gorgeous writing, old friend.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you my darling and yes I did mean wander - I'll change it thank you x

[quinfinn]

a pleasure to read you....