Sharp Bite!

Just me trying to get back to what I'm great at - horror poetry - give me time! enjoy!

The perfect lines trap droplets of salty sweat that lingers on my tongue,

Pink flesh waits like whipped cream beneath a tort sheet of new skin,

Perfumes from bottles bought at the finest houses of Paris and London,

Licking softly you tremble just to tease me as noise ends with the drop of a pin.

 

Nibble and suck as time reveals a slight red and purple haze on that neck,

A guide of sorts for men like me we use to land the final stroke we want,

Hands wander over your stomach tight muscles to hold fast upon strength,

That groin stirring not yours of course but mine that anticipation the font.

 

Moments come and moments go fast so savour your time with this creature,

Sharp incisors pierce through that landing of colour to the food flowed fast,

Red nectar fills my horrid mouth drops filter over hungry lips to stain my face,

Heads spin your heart pounds in rhythm with my fingers tightening go past.

 

Allow you to go and leave a lonely planet and remember this is for another,

A being kept young and subtle a beauty for others to ponder in eternity bound,

Hollow succour I understand my darling how a fist kiss can end happiness,

Slump down to the filthy ground now a memory to those until your body is found.

Author's Note

I'm trying to get back to being me - I hope you enjoy.

Reviews

[unsavable_soul]

I absolutely love this. This captures the seductive nature vampires have long been known for. I thank you for the request on this one. I ask may I place it in my library,please?
You greatly portray also the strong ideas and almost sentiments of that being, the sensual nature, means the beast of the hunt. I will say I think I see a couple issues if your interested. This is very strong, compelling I am not sure in a way if I want to be the beast or the prey.
Excellent.
Christopher

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

By all means Chris - go for it, and to be honest I'm not sure if I want to be beast or prey either!

[unsavable_soul]

not sure what I thought was wrong, I read it again and I see nothing. It's 3:am here my mental lethargy has turned into down right mental decay... sorry friend. This piece is perfect as is, forgive my late night mistake.
Chris

[Einstein Noodle]

Vampires!! an age old fright who commands sexuality and the yielding of neck and blood ..i think you cpture very well this classic tale ..the rhyming is so natural i barely take note in the reading .. i don't quite "become" the Vampire .. but pretty damn close i am the voyeur ; =
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[Terohime]

This was very well written, the flow of the words was just perfect. Thanks for the great read.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

THank you.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Love...cringing...love....shuddering :) I love the imagery in this one. There is so much going on; so much storytelling in this piece that still maintains a good flow and cadence that is friendly to the reader. Well done.

[Crystal Marie Dreier]

Oh my god that was not what i was expecting. But I loved this none the less! It was creepy in a way and the images were so vivid in my mind. Great job hun!

[Ufi Auttorri ~ Amy C. T..]

The articulation of motion is fluid and the camera does not want for proper framing. It is all antique brass and polished wood. Another trophy for the fireplace mantle, Thomas.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you

[s y e]

Wooo, Dark and powerful.... nicely combined! Great job!

[Marie]

Not actually enjoyable, but certainly good.

[Dayran]

A body that is good enough to eat, make love to and eventually find itself. The beginnings of understanding in a passion too hot to hold in the mind but must of itself create a longing in the blood.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

thank you

[John Alexander McFadyen]

A very descriptive, detailed account of the vampire bite. Worrying thing is you appear to really enjoy it Thomas! Captured in a way that explains the vampire's view and drivers. Intriguing read.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

I know it's terrible but I really do! x

[Ravyne Hawke]

Passionate and Dark.. you do such a wonderful job of blending the two together.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you Lori!