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A tiny insight into war and her slain!

The horrid year we bound young and willing for death,

The issue was to relieve those there now haggard,

Dust flew from an earth now stained with bloods,

A captain made sure to leave all men so badgered.

 

Snipers surrounded those foolish enough to be seen,

Terror filled those natives as anger rushed dissolve,

Fake names passed freely onto wives of no face,

We must turn and keep brief our most vigilant resolve.

 

Now tired with no men at our sides but in oblivion,

Trumpets sound the new wave comes forth in plight,

Heavy eyes stare home to a country scorned in memory,

No reason again for the endless and never fair fight.

Author's Note

This piece was inspire by a fellow writer - Baby Richoet, take the time to read his work.

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

"Now tired with no men at our sides but in oblivion,



Trumpets sound the new wave comes forth in plight,



Heavy eyes stare home to a country scorned in memory,



No reason again for the endless and never fair fight."
There is a price to pay for everything and wars cost a heavy price on lives and societies. Peace and justice should be our ultimate goals for it leaves a more lasting effect than bloodshed which creates more hatred and cycles of revenge.
You have penned a great piece on this subject...:)

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcoem...:)

[Mark]

The last line is especially telling and hits me in the heart. Enjoyed reading.

[Coyote Poetry]

"Snipers surrounded those foolish enough to be seen,
Terror filled those natives as anger rushed dissolve,"
War leave no winners. Only men with memories of death. Thank you for the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Peter H]

good peace my friend

[Ravyne Hawke]

I've written several poems about war and the after-effects so I know the pain and heartache that you have expressed in this piece. So much tragedy and so many who just try to forget. You did a wonderful job of describing this.

[Baby Ricochet]

This is an outstanding piece of poetry and I'm both proud and honored to have been a part of it. Thank you so much Thomas. You are a Prince

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you

[Dayran]

Its possible to apply oneself to most things with a creative flourish of words and expressions. But one area you'll never be able to do that is war. The sheer physical effort, the courage, the decision making and the fight to stay alive cannot be duplicated with words from the armchair. Your poem leaves room for improvement.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

this reminded me of friends lost in viet nam...not just physically but emotionally...

and we all wondered, was it worth it?

powerful write.

jacob

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you.

[Deuces]

Very deep and concise thoughts of battle as well as the regretful aftermath. My best friend being an Iraqi vet, this reminded me of his journaling. This would be an awesome voiceover piece/narration to a war film.

Unique. Enjoyed!

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Awe, that is high praise indeed, thank you x

[David Scott]

I felt like this was a real battle. The write brings the reader into the mental state so fast that you have to puase and catch your breath as your read it to take it in.
Well done.
Favorite line, "Fake names passed freely onto wives of no face,". This is a part of war forgotten indeed.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you very much x

[John Alexander McFadyen]

A very poignant piece setting out the wants of war and its frail friends.
Don't know what you think but I saw the final line as :
'No reason again for the endless and unfair fight'

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

thank you