The Prayer.

Just a look at prayer and how we say them

Help us all dear Father so,

As we kneel down in your warming glow,

Bless the people with loving showers,

A heighted feat of your awesome powers.

 

Our Mother held in hearts of many,

Never looking for as much as a penny,

Guided hand that leads her children true,

We bask and come forth washed anew.

 

A son came and looked on in awe,

To see a people stripped bare and raw,

Sins they had and sins they had dealt,

His sacrifice we witnessed and more so felt.

 

The all telling spirit that binds man to God,

A dove has flown across skies and we nod,

Salute of kinds the only hope we need,

As they have been there in our very creed.

 

Author's Note

Honesty.

Reviews

[VennelaMargame]

The sentiment is very warm and lovely, and I'm glad to see the rhymed couples in rough iambic tetrameter. Not many people have an appreciation for form anymore, and I feel that more ought to try it.

My one concern is that the language could be a little fresher. Things like "people stripped bare and raw" and "never looking for so much as a penny" are rather cliche and old-fashioned. Try playing with metaphor and figurative language a bit and see where your imagination goes would be my recommendation.

Happy writing, friend.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

thank you, I'll take it into consideration.

[KAREN]

Though this was written from the heart, and I read it from the heart! Awesome work!

[Buniheart]

A sweet and warm prayer.

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem is amazing. I'm glad when you write with your heart and hope. Poetry support make us cry, laugh, love and find hope. Thank you for the outstanding poem.
Coyote

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

I am a believer in God just not organized religion... I really liked this prayer, it connects our savior more with his Children more then regular prayers do.

[Valentine]

Beautiful, I am a Christian and any writing that offers up thanks and praise to our Maker is wonderful,,thanks for this and the warm feeling I got inside of my heart and soul..Kathie

[John Alexander McFadyen]

I do not personally subscribe to religion but this expresses your deepbelief in a very open way.

[Dalia]

Just newly I've started reading poems about prayer,but this one includes beauty of some kind and draws a wonderful image.
thanks for sharing

[Dr Ayaz chandio]

full of positive energy ,and nicely expressed. keep it as much energetic in writing as it is inside you in your feelings.

[Dayran]

A poem that speaks of discovering the work of God in the world. A great homecoming Thomas.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you

[PoeticVandal]

I don't care much for prayer, but this is a beautiful verse.