My Sparta!

A look at a place and people I've fallen in love with.

Mothers of men roam free among the grasses,

Strike chords within the hearth of male kin,

Attica asks why they rule over strong men,

Bear witness to those that never use sin.

 

Greeks scratch at stone in our honour,

Speak of glory and freedom from corruption,

Pedantry has not now or ever been food,

Strong will and power slack needless abruption.

 

Helen and Gorgo refuse to take the bait,

Leonidas shake hands with enemies nah one,

Cynisca has power that rival the future beauty,

Menelaus our king and god how graves are gone.

 

Sparta the heaven for all warriors and slaves,

A true force of nature and tattered dreams,

Carvings tell of all those pleasant and bloody wars,

How history forgets the telling and secret schemes.

 

 

Author's Note

Honesty!

Reviews

[外人 (Gaiji..]

I missed your poems, sir, with the author's note saying "honesty" ! xD
So, let me be honest, since you asked it:
the first thing that catch my attention is your great knowledge, you've put so many important people's name in the poem ! (I honestly remember only Helen and Menelaus, I've always hated greek mythology xD). Your metrica is outstanding, it is so perfect that I can SEE it, no need to count syllables. Use of quatrains, a classical :). Great pathos, looks pretty much a praise !

[KAOlmsted]

Oh I love this...you're very good, aren't you? ;-)

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Well I try! thank you

[KAOlmsted]

My pleasure. I look forward to delving deeper into your work.

[Pritesh]

Your interest to the mythology is beyond skeptics.The world mentioned ideally is unimaginable in presents context.Maybe the world turns alike and long live your poetic charm.keep writing:-D

[Lane Craver]

Very cool indeed!

[quarintine_deathangel]

You always write exquisetly clear, your facts are straight. Well done :) thanks for the read request.

[lei]

a recollection of ancient times.. beautiful!

[.]

You have a beautiful way with words, sounds like an amazing place. Amazing xx loved it :)

[Yina]

That was truly beautiful!:) Somehow I'm imaging all this as a very gorgeous place, am I right? Made even more interesting by the use of my name:P

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Well if I could travel back in time to that place, I would!

[Yina]

To bad you can't turn back time eh?

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

lol, Inndeed x

[Yina]

:) so, we friends? lol

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Maybe!

[Fragilebrokendreams]

Hm this is really a nice piece on this land. I love the choice of words that are used and the rythm is constant. Nicely done.

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Great stuff here, something different to read, very thrilling, nice :)