Illusion

An Illusion of the mind,

A wish of a kind,

A walk through life blind,

 

You bring down the shutters,

A bloody numb reflection utters,

I know what you did last summer.

 

You take your daily jog,

Then hear screams filling the fog,

Save..me....you dog.

 

Do you remember when you muffled my screams,

When you wanted to dwell in my dreams....

But now you must have repurcussions to the brim.

 

You break a sweat and think it was just another nightmare,

Where you stripped off her clothes bare,

you watched her die in a sinister glare.

 

All murderers should meet the grim reaper and so will you,

For all the things you've helped other freaks outdo,

You'll hue and noone will give a hoot.

 

Its not an illusion,Its payback time,

You will pay for this with your dear life,

Then your blood will be used as the reaper's dine.

Reviews

[EmpressPoetess]

Quite grim and scarey! A great way to get revenge! The flow is good, imagery is clear and the tale told well.

[Ebs]

Very interesting style. i've never seen it before. But it worked really nicely for the poem. the atmosphere created was chilling and i felt a little spooked by it :) One piece of advice though. In your last verse if you continue to follow the style of the poem it would all rhyme. But you don't. You follow a new style. I think That if you were to keep to your rhyming on the last verse it would have a better affect.
Here's a website i sometimes use when i'm trying to make things rhyme: http://www.rhymezone.com/
Try it if you have trouble thinking of rhymes

Good poem

Ebs

[Michael X]

this poem creates a wowwing experience, seriously depthful and dramatically charged,
felt like i was watching the events unfold in a theator, this is great poetry.