Olympian Love

Creative Writing

Some said it was a love envied by the gods,

Some called it a myth, but our story is still said every now and then, passed down in folklores,

You see they said Cupid shot us,

Two hearts, two arrows,

Passionate, erotic love,

Orpheus would play the harp anytime we made love,

How fast every touch we made on our bodies sent a message to our brains,

Or was it the work of Hermes?

How we quaked the earth every time our bodies came together,

Angering the earth god Gaia,

Mortals would argue that we had Posiedon’s trident,

'Cause the love we made caused floods on the earth,

Olympian love that’s what they called it,

Blessed and cursed by Ares and Aphrodite,

Love so consuming that it was so volatile,

Yet Hera was in agreement with such a unison, and sometimes called it celestial,

They said the 3 fates had no authority over our destinies,

Seems our love was one too pure for control by deities,

Whispers in the wind of how we changed the seasons,

With every kiss and every touch, this romance they said was treason,

Moon and stars bore witness,

To how we shamelessly laid topless,

Lost in what we shared,

We never realised how much they stared,

Jealously and insecurity, two emotions,

Crept in without our notion,

Anticlimax to our love story.

Author's Note

honest opinions please..thanks

Reviews

[Aradia Lecrawe]

It's almost like reading an ancient Greek version of Poe's 'Annabel Lee'. Celestial beings coveting a love that mortals share. I think Gaia should be addressed as a goddess since she was one of the primordial deities of the time and not an Olympian. I'm not sure if you're trying to only include deities in this poem or not, but I'm just going on the title because Orpheus was not a god, but an Argonaut. I love the style of the poem. I love the idea of the gods being jealous of mortals and their love. You did an absolute wonderful job on pairing deities with aspects of your subjects' passions. I would just watch the execution.

[Sami Khalil]

This was a splendid read and write. I enjoyed the poem a lot...:)...................

[Lyn Anderson]

I get the idea, just not following all the elements of the execution. But that might just be me. I am not a super wordy poet, so some of the longer more descriptive pieces are lost on me, just as my staccato one word verses confuse and irritate others. Maybe ask poets who have similar works?