DEAD: Heartbreak and Guilt

Guilt and Frustration of a dead lover

Dirge of the midnight

Sadness in every word

Pain pumped in the heart

She curse the day she fell in love

 

Darkness in the sunshine

Madness in the moonlight

Tears of a lifetime

Anger in the graveyard

 

I died

I died!

I promised her a forever after

But... I died.

 

I took away her hope

Left her alone in a world so cold

Without joy, to forever mope

'Cause I died

 

How do I tell her to drop that knife?

How do I tell her I'm not gone?

How do I tell her about the tiny heartbeat in her womb?

How...?

 

I'm dead...

And it hurts

Author's Note

please review honestly

Reviews

[xx]

"Anger in the graveyard" - I love that. There aren't many poetic fragments that stay with me long, but that one just rolled off my tongue and is still rolling around in my head, bumping against all the nooks and crannies. It's an apt description of the regret or the bitterness one would feel, unable to do anything at all, restricted to merely watching the goings-on without being of any use.

It's a tragic story, the one nestled into these lines, the woman mourning for her dead lover, unaware that his only remaining living legacy is alive and well inside her. It's a sad, sad thing, the inability to see the things that are so critical, that could make all the difference, between even life and death, whether figurative or metaphorical.

Just one minor little thing - the last line of the first stanza. You might want to edit that tense error there; I think that was just a simple misspelling, so I have no doubt you'll find it easy to correct.

Good work, and keep writing! :)

-Mina

[Lilmissfit]

so sad, filled with anger, guilt, frusteration, longing, and heart ache. The reader can practically feel all of the emtions. This poem makes reader long to know the story behind it, wonderfull write! :) theres no doubt that the best poems are the ones comming from those who's words come from their very souls..

[Wendy Seames Garner]

So sad, almost a Romeo and Juliette ending (except Romeo is really dead).