To Love A Devil

I hate the way I love you

Not so long ago
I was just a boy
I was so full of life
Was without a direction in the world
Yet, my heart was big, soft, n fair

Then you came knocking
Your cute smile n passionate eyes
Who could resist you?

You became my habit
My obsession
For two whole years, you were the reason I lived
You became my whole world

But on a cold tuesday night-
Three days before our anniversary
Three nights before I asked you to be my wife-
On the bed we shared
I found a note
A Dear John you wrote

"with you I had fun
with you I feel loved.
With you I can be free,
But now I have to leave

"I'm sorry, but I met someone
And he means a lot to me.
King, he asked me to be with him!
I want to be with him!

"When you love the way I love him,
King,
You'll understand the way I feel.
Thanks for the memories,
I will always cherish them. :)"

...you chopped my heart into a hundred tiny pieces
You roasted them over a fire you started inside me
Served them to me with a smiley face n my tears to drink.
Girl, you rigged my world with explosives
Then you made me watch as it levelled before me

You're the devil, n I'm a fool

For why else would you be in my arms
Just a year later, crying over my shoulders
After he left you
A wreck with a baby in a tired womb

Author's Note

This is the longest piece I've ever written. It is also the only poetry I've written In a year n change, so please be gentle n constructive.

Reviews

[Bonaventure Onuabuchi]

This work helps me knowing I am not alone in the race of facing hurtful dissappointment. Good one brother... Bona!

[BriBri]

Love it, love it , love it

[Monday Parker]

OUCH! Man...I can feel your anguish and rawness. This is hella sad, but what great poetry is made from. This is a great poem. I read it twice-just to get the feeling fully. Great job..But i am sorry for the reasons you wrote it.

[Sindu]

Clearly conveys the massacred journey. Hurts when they destroy all you give and turn up after all that. It is beautifully written from the blooms to glooms and intensifying the pain.

[Geo Lawrence]

men...
the law of karma caught up with the erring damsel...
i kinda feel happy that she ended up liKe that...

nice poem, rich words...i feel u bro

[Arthur Subklew]

I like it! I really felt the heartbreak. It came so sudden and impacted me. I was unhappy. The female character seemed very flighty. This reads like a short story formed into a poem to me. Some of your stanzas could flow a bit better and give it more impact. Particularly the "..you chopped my heart into..."
How about: Painfully you diced my heart and roasted the pieces on a fire of your making. You obliterated me, playfully making me me watch my own demise as if I too should see the simple humor of your playful, empty heart....
I enjoyed your poem. The pain is hard to look at, the reality unavoidable. I wonder if in future drafts you might even bring a tear to the eyes by working on the flow of your sentences, allowing them to play a smoother melody. Funny how pain and disappointment carry so nicely on a tune. Kudos! Thanks for sharing!

[Leslie Philibert]

Love the clarity of the voice, the way you bring over complex messages in a readable way; excellent !

[TL Boehm]

a heavy, real and transparent write. That's the worst type of ache when someone leaves giddy and then comes back broken. There is a part that says - it serves you right and another part that says I forgive you.
You're the devil, n I'm a fool
maybe, maybe not.
a thought provoking write. Well done.

[Coyote Poetry]

When we love the devils and the demons. No good ending will be possible. I enjoyed the tale and the ending is true for many. Falling to sweet words and left with memories. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Tree]

Nothing to do but be gentle, because I felt this. She didn't leave King right, she should have left real words, not a letter, and she should of been sure, real sure

Bigger man, than me.

Excellent piece

[kingblaq]

Thanks man...it means a lot! Its been a year, n I didn't know what to expect.
King, is a much more bigger than I am too!

[kingblaq]

Thanks man...it means a lot! Its been a year, n I didn't know what to expect.
King, is a much more bigger than I am too!