window

another one of my favorites. this tells a story and gives insight on not just a single point of view. and i love the ending. enjoy!

For years I have been staring through my window
Always going near it every second of every morrow
And from the corner of my eye I see the mystery
That consistently haunts me in my deepest fantasy.

A guy of twenty-two or so
One of which whose name I never got to know
Made me swoon from the first day I saw him here
Made me always wish that to me he would someday be near

He had these eyes of crystalline sheen
And lips that curved into that easy grin
A bod that's tanned to utmost perfection
And teeth that shone as if to light a whole nation

I doubt it to be my fault that it is he
Who my heart longs for, who I badly want to marry.
I now it sounds real crazy but then I don't even care
'Coz I am happy jsut as long as I get to see him there

Meanwhile, across this street there was this handsome guy
Secretly glancing at the girl he found with lovely eyes
Thinking to himself how greatly things would come to be
"If only she would look out through her window back at me..."

Author's Note

please ignore the rhyming if you're not into that. what did you think of the story and the ending?

Reviews

[Mike Zentz]

Awesome! I wonder how often our love is requited and we just don't know it

[Elemiah]

I rather liked the rhyming. It's hard to do well and have the poem still make sense, but I think you did a good job with that. The ending was good too, and it makes me hope that one day they will actually meet each other. Judging by the way they see each other, they're probably soulmates in some way.

[kurrupted]

wow, splendid and hey! the rhyming is good too. you really get the reader at the end lol!.lovely concept well put, indeed just as one looks out from inside, so is someone also looking inside from outside (thats the irony of life i guess).
i really love the flow too,for the stanzas are well connected.double thumbs up

[wizthom]

a game of peek a boo who seeing who as i watch you,,

love the write and dreams and hope,of oneday reality bringing fate 2gether thu the window,,wizthom